Jul 5, 2023
okay... i'm thoroughly convinced that myuuna** doesn't know how to write stories with any actual respect to the the characters in the stories or the readers. this whole thing just reads like a checklist of things that should probably be included in a shoujo manga, i'm actually beginning to be convinced that they're just writing the easiest and unimpressive kind of love stories as a front for like money laundering or something.
that's MOSTLY a joke for legal reasons, but i mean what other explanation is there, really? it seems like this "myuuna**" person, whoever they are, just makes up some random characters and does the
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old "draw from a hat, throw a dart at a dartboard" kind of storytelling where they just try to fit as many clichés into a story as possible to make it feel simultaneously SO bloated and essentially like the story version of cotton candy dropped into a puddle of water.
they clearly do not care about their characters at all. all of them are lazily written and 1-dimensional. you know from minute one that the ML is only fronting as a player because some "traumatic" event happened to him sometime between when he saved the FL and when the story begins. you know immediately from the clunky way her childhood friend is introduced that he's gonna confess to her at the drop of a hat, whenever she shows interest in the ML. it's just so fucking BORING, i can't stand it. and i know that most shoujo enjoyers are smarter than this. they wouldn't like it either! so the only conclusion is that it's not actually being written for ANYONE.
i started feeling like i was gonna throw up from laughing so hard about the point where the FL's female friend was introduced because it's so fucking hilarious that they didn't feel like it was necessary for her to show up until that point because the only thing that "actually matters" in shoujo is that the romantic leads get as much time together as possible, right?
storytelling actually ISN'T about creating a rich narrative around characters and their relationships to one another; it's actually about how fast in an afternoon you can shit out a romance story about two fucking giant idiots who are only concerned with one another and no one else in their lives is ever given the time of day or the spotlight because they're not the important ones. that's crazy! you learn something new everyday!
you cannot seriously tell me that young love happens this quickly, i don't CAAAAAAAAAAAARE. there are stories where the MCs get together in chapter one that are WAY FUCKING BETTER than anything this dumbass author could ever hope to even imagine, let alone write. it's so unrealistic, and hyper-fictionalized and so reliant on tropes and clichés and annoying bullshit. if you told me this is the shoujo manga that the girls in shoujo manga read, i would believe you. if you told me someone trained an AI to write a shoujo manga and this was the result, i'd believe you. if you told me that this was an approximation of what shoujo manga seems like to someone who's never read a single one before, i would believe you.
it's. that. fucking. bad.
once again, though, the art is lovely.
[10 year long sigh]
Reviewer’s Rating: 1
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