Just read your edited review and it is a big improvement from the previous one however your sentences are pretty disconnected, meaning they don't flow from one to another. The fact that you made a new line for each sentence also forced me to pause before reading the next line but at least your "Art", "Sound" and "Enjoyment" department were fine. ^_^
Just read you ef review, well I tried to read it and 2 things struck me:
1. It was way too long.
2. It was too opinionated and mostly about your experiences when watching the show the actual show itself.
Other than that it was pretty good and I agree with quite a few of the points you made. Well try to improve on your reviewing, if you feel like continuing. ^_^
Well, you can say it like that. But, it is better off to talk first then add them to your friends list, rather than throwing out some random friend invitations even though you've never talked to that person.
For example, in real life. You say "Hi" or "I'm (state your name)" first rather than "Can I be your friend?". It's like to introduce yourself first then start talking about things. ^_^
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thanks for joining my Harima Kenji-Club^^
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1. It was way too long.
2. It was too opinionated and mostly about your experiences when watching the show the actual show itself.
Other than that it was pretty good and I agree with quite a few of the points you made. Well try to improve on your reviewing, if you feel like continuing. ^_^
Okey-dokey :D
Well, Elfen Lied wasn't my world.
For example, in real life. You say "Hi" or "I'm (state your name)" first rather than "Can I be your friend?". It's like to introduce yourself first then start talking about things. ^_^