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| The Room It was the year 2001 I was 10 years old at that time.The war ended 5 years ago but it left his marks on the landscape.One day I and a some of my friends started to play hide and seek next to my apartment.It war really fun and i decided to hide somewhere where no body would find me.There was a old aluminum plate next to the entrance to the apartment complex.It was the perfect place.Or at least that's what thought... The thing that I didnt know was that , that the plate was hiding a door , a big door.The glass was broken so that I could enter it with my slim body.It was a big dark room and there was only one beam of light passing trough the broken part of the wall.I started to panic and left it.My friends started to ask me why I was sweating ; I explained it to them , the door , the room , and so on.They thought that , that was the perfect place for a «seacret base» I tried to tell them that I had a bad feeling about that but they didn t listen to me. First part :D |
Bl4ckEnvyMay 5, 2011 1:25 PM
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| Next day I received a call from a friend telling me to go outside as quick as possible.I rushed out only to find all my friends in-front of the plate.They all looked angry , something was happening.The glass was repaired , no it looked as good as new.The only explanation I had was that somebody saw us and didnt want us to go behind there.That night i couldn't sleep.I had a strange feeling , like a urge to go outside.It was like a nail in the back.As soon as the first rays of light crossed my window I got a flash lamp and gone outside.It was so quite like I was was in the middle of nowhere.But that allowed me to work in peace.I was even ready to brake the glass to see if what was behind there.But when I got behind the plate I almost started to scream the glass , yes the glass was broken it looked just like it was before.I entered the room ready to see what was at the end of it.I turned the flashlight on only to see the burned walls and wood everywhere.But the thing that scared me the most where the dolls the burned dolls and the toys.It looked like someone left them in the fire.I try ed to walk as far i could but the room was getting darker and darker till I got to some corridor.I tripped over something.It almost stopped my heart.The flashlight fell right in front.The light fell one left side of the corridor.That was the only place that the fire didn t damage , there was stuff there like some used to live here.The stuff was old but it seamed in a pretty good shape.And then i heard a noise like footsteps.I started to panic so I picked up the box next to me and i threw it as hard as i could.The noise stopped for a moment , but in the next the thing that was there started to scream.I dropped everything I had on me and runned away. Second part :D |
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| Wow that's really good ^^ I hope you're finishing this off ^^ |
| Agreed. Though I'm not a scary genre fan, I'm interested in knowing what happens next. :) Keep writing! |
| Gasping for breath and with tears going down my eyes my only thought was "I made it".Looking at the plate while the people where asking me what happened.I somehow made it to my room.I was so scared , hiding under the blanket asking myself if the things that happened there where real.It was midday when the light in my room disappear.There was only darkness.I rushed to the door but i couldn't open it.It was cold really cold.All the things in the room froze solid and i felt someone breathing behind my back.Siting in the corner with the blanket on my head I was something that I will never forget , I saw it.Letters appeared on the window , no someone was writhing them "Why don t you play with us".The next moment to room turned normal.But i couldn't move.Siting there i saw only one solution " I need help".But no one would believe me I m just a kid.I started asking my friends to go in the room with me , but they told me that all of the parents forbid the entering.So I had to do it alone.But I need to be prepared , I put on my running shoes and a few flashlights.It was harder then I thought my brain was ready but my body still remembered the shock.The moment i got in it started to be hot , like there is a big fire.I shouted and shouted that "I m here".Suddenly a ball came from the darkness.I kicked it back and try ed to see who was there with the flashlight.It was like the light couldn't get to that place.The things in the darkness started shouting " play , play , play" I couldn't take anymore I told them that they are not there that they are dead and that this isn t a place for them.They pushed me back I hit my head on the wall.The next thing I remember is my dad carrying me to the hospital.I was in the room for 2 days.The things didn t call me anymore and the plate was fixed to the wall so no one could get to the room.It was the end of it. Now I m older and I know what happend .... During the war people hid in that room mostly children without parents.The hole in the wall through which came light was the place where the bomb broke through.There was a big fire.And the children where locked in the room trying to brake the glass. Tnx for the support it was a bit shorter than i expected and the room really those exist but no such thing happened in there.I m already making my next work.It will be called A Dream. |
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| A Dream What is a dream ?There are many theory's about that.But the most common one is that the dreams help us in controlling our emotions , each dream is for one emotion we have that day , and we have hundreds of them.Enough of that. Imagine if you could live twice as long.In theory there is a gene that makes us age , and if we could find that gene and deactivate it we could life for at least 200 years.But it is not possible in this century , yet people found another solution to the problem.We sleep 1/2 of our life.The story begins here.After years of investment a company in America finally made it the so called " Wonder Drug ".Just one pill and you would never sleep again.In just 3 weeks 60% of the population took that drug and in a month 95% of the world population stooped sleeping for ever.The rest refused to take it , hiding in the argument it is not natural not to sleep.My father was one of them.When I asked him why he is so against the drug he told me " Blessing can also be a curse".And that is why I m writing this diary.The first incidents happened a year after.A local policeman started shooting around , he killed a lot of people till the police put him down.It seamed normal after all things like that happen from time to time.But it was not normal , people started screaming and attacking other people.It just happened in a instant.More and more of these incidents happened.One day my father woke me up telling me to go to the hills with him.When I asked him what is happening he just replied " Chaos".As we climbed more uphill I saw it the city was in flames people started attacking each other and there where explosions everywhere it was like my father describe it , it was "Chaos".Soon we met a old friend of my dad they used to be good friends , well they "used" to be good friends he started attacking us.He pushed him down a cliff without a second thought the strange thing about that was even trough his legs where broken the continued to walk towards us.As we arrived in our hunting hut deep in the mountain woods we rested.A week later I heard screams coming from the river , I rushed there without thinking.Its was a girl not much older then I m she hurt her leg.The moment she saw me to shouted " Run its coming" Tell me what you think about it so I can decide to continue or drop this one |
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| That is wonderful! Do carry on writing it ^^ |
| This is the unedited (rough draft) of a short story I was writing, its in a few separate parts, I'll post the other parts should anyone want to read more of it. It is based on a true story. The Encroaching Darkness As the clock stuck 1:30 I slithered out from under my covers. I was already dressed in anticipation for tonight. I slide my machete on my back and my hunting knife into my pocket, after all, one can never be too careful. Last of all I took my flashlight, hoping that it would be able to ward off the night. I slipped through the house like a wraith, careful not to make the slightest noise. I glided down the stairs and stole out through the basement window, shutting, but not latching it so that I could get back inside when the time came. This was my escape from the never-ending cycle of boredom that was the daylight hours of my life; the constant tedious repetition that was every day living. Day in and day out I sat around, doing absolutely nothing, boredom clouding my thoughts until finally my eyes would droop just far enough so that I wouldn’t see the desk come flying at my forehead. After that I would remain awake for several hours until stagnation set in and the process would repeat itself. But at night I lived! The constant adrenaline rush of pitting my whits against that which lurked in the dark gave me a sense of purpose and freedom which, when compared to my lacking and starved existence, left me craving more. The danger was intoxicating, the thrill addictive. It kept me returning night after night; every step I took kept daring me to go even farther than I had before. The night was my element, the time when I was at my peak. I was the king of the forest that occupied the territory around my home. Nothing knew it as I did. Every time the skies darkened I sought to expand my domain. I felt no trepidation as I pushed farther into the brush, after all, mankind does not fear the darkness, but rather he fears what the darkness hides, and I believed myself a match for anything that lurked beyond my sight. I moved out from my home and melded into the forest, reveling in my newfound freedom. I strode about for a while, traveling back and forth between my favorite haunts, content with the silence about me. Lost were the ordinary troubles of the world, replaced instead by the comforting embrace of the forest. Gone were the streetlights and sirens that bored into ones brain. Gone were the insatiable crowds, constantly spouting out meaningless jargon in an effort to appease those around them. All that was left was the solace found in the midnight air. Content, I laid down in the soft grass, stretching out and closing my eyes, seeking the comfortable embrace of the forest. Lost in contemplation, I didn’t notice as slowly the sound around me faded into silence… |
| A fresh marred couple moved in , in a apartment in the center of New York.It was cheap so they buyed it without thinking much about it.They where a common couple , he was a bank manager and she was was running her own store.Like every common pair they had a pet;a cat to be precise.The cat was afraid to enter the apartment.It was strange but in the end they forced it to come in.And here is the begining of our story.The cat was named Cezar.He was always moving around the house the strange thing was that he was looking at a wall in the living room.And in a few days he didnt walk at all all he did was stare on the wall.He didn t eat he didnt sleep he was just staring at it.The owners try ed to put some thing in-front of it so they can block it.But it was moved in the night.And as soon as they took Cezar he would start to screech and bite.Cezar died in the next few days.They took him to the vet to see what was wrong with he but everything looked ok.In the following years they completely forgot the wall and Cezar.Pete and his wife Maria lived they normal everyday life's. They even decided to have a kid.When it was finally born it was named Jack.The first few months where alright and then it started again.As soon as Jack learned to walk he stoped at the wall. Is eyes where full of happynes he looked and looked at it.Maria took him away but then he started crying.Pete didn t like how the thing where going he got all possible specialists to see what was going on but non of them had a clue.They had to feed Jack by force.One day Pete decided to paint the wall but first he had to remove the tapete.Marie was in the bedroom when she heard his screams.She runned towards the living room , Pete was on the ground looking at the wall with a shocked face.Before she managed to ask him why he was screaming she saw it.The wall on the wall was a face print.Pete over painted it but it always returned. |
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| Here is my story. This is about a tom boy name Tina who planned to make her third year in high school the best one. But is stalk by someone. She later find outs that its her old babysitter and childhood friend Bruce who came to for filled the promise they made of marrying each other if they ever meet again. He wont take no for a answer and the more he shows his love to her, the more she felt it like she is metal herself. This is a romance psychological thriller and tell what you think about it. Chpt 001: At the suburbs, Tina is getting ready for her junior year in high school. She is hoping to make it the best year yet but gets a feeling that she is being watch. She meet ups with her friends, Cloewy and Mimi who are twin sister as they meet at Tree hill high school. They go to their first class as they talk about a cute boy that is into Tina. She is a bit surprise but then a shadow figure is outside watching her. She turn to look but its gone. She wonder what she had sense just a moment ago. When the day is over, she walks home but then a bunch of guys came up to her asking if she wants to have fun with them. She refuses but the guys don’t like it so they grab her and starts to have fun with her. But got interrupted as a guy came and beat them hard. He grabs the leader and puts him at the edge of the crosswalk and grabs his head and pulls it down and hurting his neck. He begs until he let him go and warn him if he does this again. Tina thanks her but then he hugs her as he is so happy to see her which Tina doesn’t know about. This shocks him so leaves saying he has to put the memory back in by force with a creepy looking smile. The next day, she thinks of what that guy said and wonder if he met him somewhere. The assistant principle came to get her as her cousin came to see her. Tina is confuse as her cousin is not even in the states. When she enter the room, The same person from yesterday is in front of her sight as she widen her eyes. The person told the assistant to leave so she could talk to her. She is to afraid to speak a single word as the assistant principle close the door. Chpt 002: Tina becomes afraid of the way how he smiles at her. She ask what his name is which just made him angry and put his arm down. He goes up to her and begin to kiss her by force which Tina couldn’t resist. She slap him and ask him why did he did that. He tells her how she remembers her being angry and looking cute. Tina begins to wonder but then it hit her as when she takes a good look of his face and ask him if his name is Bruce. Bruce is happy for her when she remember. He grabs her and started to say how much he has miss her. When she went back home, she ask her mom and dad if they remember Bruce. They told how he always help out when their poor at the time. She wanted to tell them that she met him but couldn’t so she goes to her room. She begins to wonder why she couldn’t say anything. She start to remember how when Bruce always protects her and showing how special she is. She thought that his love for her is a misunderstanding as she wonder what happen to him after 9 years. We see them from 9 years ago as Bruce is crying. Tina wanted him to stop but then he confess his love to her which Tina also responded of her loving him too. She grabs her moms wedding ear rings and told him to hold on as if they meet again, They promise to marry each other. She wakes up from the dream of her past and wonders where she put the other ear ring. As she walks, her math homework gets blown on to the wind but Bruce manage to catch it. She wanted to talk to him about what happened yesterday but then saw the ear ring on the ground. Bruce is happy that she found as he cleans it everyday since they been separated. He ask where Tina’s ear ring. She didn’t want to answer but then he grab her ear and put the ear ring in her ear. Tina ran away from him and heads to the school as Bruce follow her. Chpt 003: She got to the school early and goes to the nurses office before school starts. She tries to take ring off but its really jammed in her ear tip. She can’t stand him for what he did but then started to notice how he felt for her. Then Bruce came to stop her from taking the ear ring. She gets scared but grabs her confidence so she tries to take the ring off her ear but then he throws a medicine bottle at the mirror. Bruce show off a wicked smile and grabs her. He throw her into one of the beds in the office and lays on her. Tina fight him off but then he hold her in arms and begin crying. He tells her how much he lover her and always is afraid if another guy have took her feeling and body. Tina gazes in his eyes and could not escape his seducing. Then they hear the nurse who is shocked that her mirror is broken. Tina pushes him off and begins to leave but then he grabs her and begin to do sexual thing. She wanted to escape but couldn’t as for some reason she wanted it. The nurse barge and sees Bruce laying in the bed. Tina hides at the side of the bed as he talks to her. As she left, She begins to be angry at herself as he wonder why he didn’t thought him off. She begins to think of how he dated so many boys but the way how Bruce engaged is what she wanted in a man. But she just cant see it working so she decided to not fall for it as it would only make it worse. As the new day starts, she looks around in her room for that science homework. She found it under her bed but also found the other ear ring that she couldn’t found before. When she left home, she met up with Bruce along the way. Bruce see that she is wearing the other ear ring and is happy. Tina told him to not see her again for as long she is living in her life. Bruce widen his eyes in shock as she left. Bruce goes see her in one of her class rooms as he begins to grind on the windows in anger. The class heard it so they look but he was gone before anyone can spot him. Bruce heads to the parking lot as he bang one of the cars with both hands in anger. He then says he’ll wont give up that easily. Chpt 004: In her fourth period, the Japanese boy, Yuki goes up to Tina. She blushes and is excited that he is talking to her but then as he sits on his chair it broke. Yuki okay and only suffer little damage. Tina takes a good look and sees that the chair is sabotage which made her believe its Bruce but she reject the idea. During lunch, Yuki goes and sit with Tina and her friends. Clowey and Mimi leaves so they can give some time. As they talked, Tina sees a shining spark. She looked closely and see a knife coming. Tina push Yuki out of the way. After that incident, the police came and question everybody. Then just for a moment, she catches a glip of Bruce for a moment but when she closed and open her eyes, he was gone. In the principle office, He, the teachers, and the chief talk about the situation and who is responsible. Ms. Brown, one of the teachers suggest to let the chief to interrogate every student in the class room. But Mr. Almond detest her decision as no student could not have done this. They all continue to argue until the chief fires a cap. The chief ask the principle which option should go. He decided to not interrogate the students as he suspect that the person who done it is not from this school. As people talk about what happen. Tina apologizes to Yuki about what happen but Yuki told her its not her fault. He ask if she wants to take a walk with and she answer Yes out loud. But then a rock breaks the window and knocks him hard and started bleeding. The nurse carries him and Tina runs out to the school as she look for him, shouting his name. Then Bruce came behind her responder her call. She ask in anger if he is the one who threw the rock at him. He begins to laugh which made Tina widen her eyes as he grabs her. When he gets next to her ear, he tells her that he won’t accept any rejection and he’ll make sure that no man will take her away. |
| It's a good story...but you use to many ''she'' ...and I was sometimes confused ,because you said for a boy ''she'' , but it's a good story though ... And you probably are not from USA or GB are you ? Because of the grammar ... Any way you should continue writing... :D |
| Don't depend on anyone, because even your shadow leaves you, when you're in darkness... |
Mafortion said: It's a good story...but you use to many ''she'' ...and I was sometimes confused ,because you said for a boy ''she'' , but it's a good story though ... And you probably are not from USA or GB are you ? Because of the grammar ... Any way you should continue writing... :D Thanks and Ya I know about my grammer. Once I'm done writing, I'm gonna spell check it and everything. And Ya I am from USA but My parents came from mexico so I'm guessing I'm not from here XD |
| You could have fooled me :P hehehe |
| Don't depend on anyone, because even your shadow leaves you, when you're in darkness... |
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