| 1st Tune: Veritgo Silence The deafening sound of the random alarms of the plane made it impossible to think about anything. The feeling of your body being forced downward as the plane nose dived, spiraling towards the vast earth. The sight of clouds rushing past the window only painted a picture of serenity in a time of pure terror. The alarms weren’t the only think that rummaged in my mind. The sound of the other passengers cry, parents trying to hold onto their screaming children. Men weeping as there lives are coming to an abrupt end. Curses and prayers to a divine entity from both the believers and the non believers. This was it This was how it would all end No save points No restarts Only……. Silence The buzzing ended. Everything seemed to be at peace, but rather than everything being white as I always imagined growing up in a church everything was black. I could feel my body yet I couldn’t open my eyes. Rather I felt like I was enveloped by something coarse. The feeling reminded me of the beaches in Hawaii my family would always visit… wait It was sand I could barely move my limbs but I could curl my hands and inside of my grip was sand. I was alive! But… I… Silence I can’t remember anything. I slowly opened my eyes and the blue sky with white clouds painted in like a Bob Ross art piece and the large yellow globe greeted me like I was in the world of the Teletubbies. Only without the creepy baby face. I slowly tried to lift off the coarse material beneath me but I couldn’t still feel my legs or lower half. The image of not having legs or being paralyzed flooded my mind. I started to curl my toes, all ten of them there. The fact that I can feel and curl them put to rest the thoughts of being a paraplegic. I could wait a minute but the sun beaming down on me was killing me slowly, and while growing up in a desert did make it tolerable I was still never one to enjoy frying in the heat. My eyes became adjusted to seeing the sky again and my legs started to cooperate again, giving me a boost to try to stand. I brought my legs in and slowly pushed off the sand, only to realize I wasn’t on a normal area of sand. Instead I slowly started to sink off of the face of the crest my body was laying on. Rolling down hills as a child were fun, rolling down a sand hill after not having feeling in your lower body or probably having an extreme case of vertigo was not fun. AT ALL. I finally hit the bottom of the hill, a mere groan escaping my lips as I laid in pain for a second. After said second I attempted to get up again. I had always been in and out of shape but this was by far the hardest physical activity I had done. Yep, I definitely had vertigo. As soon as I stood up, the whole world seemed like it was spinning around me. My hands quickly found my knees and I purged my stomach of whatever was in it all over the sand below my feet. After the ‘purge’ I finally started to see straight. I was surrounded by dunes and sand…. I was in a desert. ”Wh...where am I?” The words barely came out. The sun shone down with great intensity and my darker skin tone absorbed it like I was made of foliage and ate up the sunlight so I could achieve photosynthesis. I better not start turning green At least my wit was still working. I spit out the rest of the contents of my stomach before slowly moving my left foot before my right. I had no idea where I was going but I had to go somewhere. My clothes were covered in sand… well the remains of the jeans and shirt I were wearing were covered in sand. I tore the sleeve off my shirt and wrapped it around my head to cover my brow. But as I started to tie the sleeve/headband my hair started to shed sand. I forgot that I had dreadlocks, granted they weren’t long as some people but being a mixed child of an african american mother and white anglo-saxon american father gave me curly hair. My curly hair was tied into dreads that went to my shoulders and my dreads were filled with sand. ”Fuck” I started to bang my head like I was at a rock concert then transitioned to shaking it like a wet dog, trying to free my hair of sand. After ten minutes of looking like an idiot I got most of the sand out but not all of it. And an Idiot I was. Being weak and sick, shaking my head reinvigorated my vertigo or even making it worse. I couldn’t see straight at all, my vision was blurry and everything started to go dark… until I noticed something in the distance. Aside from the rising visible heat off the sand, I noticed something… a dark shadowy figure. The mirage was getting closer and closer over the horizon, but my vision started to get faded at each passing second. I reached out to the figure, maybe death did come for me. Maybe purgatory was a desert and Saint Paul was finally coming to tell me about my fate. But I’ll find out later. The last thing my body felt was it hitting the hot sand face first. The heat was nice but it was quickly replaced by a cold feeling, an embrace of some sort. Before my mind drifted to the void I felt my body being turned. My eyes were at this point so milky that I thought I was blind but I could see the figure’s outline… short hair and cat ears. |
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| Good start. Finds himself in the desert after a plane crash |
| Heh. I like that Teletubbies reference. And it's nice to see another gentleman of color up in this joint! |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| New story, new opportunity, new ideas. |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
| Sand, sun, and probably nothing but good times ahead! Just watch =P |
| 2nd Tune: No Rest For The Wicked Silence Hey babe, I’m calling you cause I’m getting on the plane now. I’ll call you again when I land Silence The image of a building with people walking back and forth to the beat of there own drums popped in my head. I turned to my left and every face was blacked out, void of any features of a human face. I felt like I wasn’t even there, I wasn’t. I moved in front of a mother and child and they fazed through me. The constant sound of a television’s white noise buzzing in my head over and over again. Down the hall was… me. He also had no face but I knew it was me, he dressed like me, had similar body features and a ring necklace around his tanned neck. He was looking at his phone, the picture of himself and a girl but… both faces were blacked out. The white noise got stronger and the bodies started moving faster and faster around me. I put my spectral hands to my head in pain, the noise, the movements Silence I took in a sharp breath through my nose as my dream kicked me out of my sleeping mind and my eyes shot open. I still felt groggy but I could see better than before. Stone ceilings, a single ray of light coming through a the window to my left and the warm light began to heat up my body. The light also illuminated the room to show that I wasn’t in kansas anymore.. I think. I slowly tried to get up but something felt heavy on my chest. I looked down and saw a bundled mass of purple and gold covers rising and falling in rhythm that was synonymous with a person breathing. “What the…” My noise startled whatever was under the covers as they started to rise until the started to slide off of the body of…. a female?! “WHAT THE?!” The covers began to fall off of the tanned skin of the girl who decided to use my body rather than the bed. What was more was that I was as clothed as I was the day I was born. The covers still obscured the face but her other features started to come into view and forever etched into my mind. Lightly tanned silky skin, a small tiny navel buttoned on like it was the lone mark on a painting. Her petite shoulders matched her toned abdomen if not a small shade darker, until it reached her forearms. I’ve seen hairy people but this girl’s arms were covered in a soft hair that reminded me of a cat’s. ”Is it breakfast already?” The girl rose more and the covers fell more, revealing her face; small, rounded but not too round. Under the sleep-riddled eyes were dark blue iris’ that rivaled the ocean blue and her short hair was darker than mine…. and two small cat ears folded down…. cat ears….. cat ears….. ”WHAT IN HOLY HELL IS THAT?!” I literally jumped from the bed. As I felt the air hit my bare skin I instinctively reached for the pillow my head laid on and covered my nether realm. The girl however was tossed across the bed, exposing her lady parts and other features to the whole world. I felt bad for staring but I sneaked a peak…. she apparently shaves down there. I shook my head as she started to sit up. Her hands and feet were paws, paws! She has a skinny cat tail waving behind her as she wiped the rest of the sandman’s spell from her eyes. ”Who yells this early in the morning? ”Someone who doesn’t know what in high hell is going on?!” I tried to catch my thoughts but they were going a hundred miles an hour faster than I could keep up with them. The girl stretched as her skin lapped up the sun but my mind got distracted at the sound of footsteps. I could feel the pit in my stomach form as the door literally busted open and a scaled foot hanging in the doorway ”Lady Sapphire, Are you ok? We heard shou….” From what I could see, the green scaled girl with light amber hair wasn’t alone as girls with similar body types as her crowded behind her, each of them brandishing a certain weapon. My body reacted instinctively and I threw my hands in the air, exposing my member to the crowd of girls. If I wasn’t embarrassed now, the collective red blush that covered each of their faces didn’t help. Fuck me ”Everything is ok Cleo.” The cat girl commanded as she started to wrap the covers around her curves like it was a makeshift dress ”Would you like to put your hands down or do you want us to continue admiring what the Ancients have given you?” She winked and the tone of her voice reminded me that I was literally giving the group a free show. My hands rocketed back down and covered myself though I could hear one girl click her teeth Screw embarrassed, this is worse than showing up to school in your underwear The cat girl clapped her paws and started to shoo away the scaled girls. She turned to me and winked before closing the door behind her. ”What the hell is going on” Before I could contemplate what the answer was the door was opened again and the cat girl peaked her face in the door ”Oh yes, we have a change of clothes for you at the foot of the bed, unless you are a nudist… oh how i hope” I saw a weird gleam in her eye as she licked her upper lip. I threw the pillow at her but she was fast and closed the door before the pillowy projectile landed. I heard a chuckle and then footsteps away from the door. God damn, what is going on? Girls with animal features? An overfriendly cat girl hybrid? What is next? I moved around the bed and looked out the window, sand and dunes as far as the eye could see. My head started to hurt as it felt like I should have remembered something but… all I could see while my eyes were closed was darkness, no mental pictures, no memories, nothing. I moved to the foot of the bed and sure enough, there was a pile of clothes at it. A black shirt that felt like cotton, black pants, and a tan jacket that had a black shoulder and red lined inside. Everything fit me perfectly except for the jacket. It was almost a size too big for me and for a six foot three inches guy it sat around my bottom. Before I even got three steps outside the same cat girl was standing before me. She wore a black, latex like one piece with a blue and gold scarf around her neck and matching waist sash. On her arms she wore gold bracelets and arm bands, three on each side and golden leather roman-like sandals. I nearly jumped out of my skin as she startled me but she just started at me with a small smile ”Follow me male unless you want to skip on breakfast” The way she talked annoyed me. Teasing then commanding. Before she moved I placed my hands next to her head against the wall and leaned in, trapping her between me and the wall ”Ok lets talk. First, I have a name and it is Chris. Second, you catch more bees with honey than with vinegar so you could drop the commanding attitude and third…” I couldn’t get the words out of my mouth. Rather, her mouth prevented me from getting the words out of my mouth by invading it with her tongue. I knew my animal anatomy and after getting attacked by numerous kittens in the past, I knew cats had rough tongues. Hers wasn’t it was smooth and soft. She tongue wasn’t like a humans but it wasn’t necessarily like a cats. My mind started to go blank again as she attacked my tongue with hers. I’ve kissed, been kissed and even learned the stupid tying a cherry stem with my tongue trick but she literally outclassed and dominated my tongue with her movements. It was like her tongue was dancing the tango while mine was tripping over two left feet. My eyes slowly closed, enveloped in the heat of the moment, and my hands found their way around her shoulders but before anything could happen she pushed away. ”nyahaha~ excellent~” She licked her lips and put her paw over her mouth ”My name is Sapphire and I seem to have taken a liking to you chris. Good thing I staked my claim before my sisters did. Now come, I’m sure father and the others are waiting to meet the guest that occupied a room for the past week” She ducked under my arm and started to walk down the hall before turning, winking and flicking her hips and tail at me. All the while the thoughts in my mind upped their intensity. What the hell? Why did she kiss me? Why did she stop? What is going on? I must be crazy Father? A WEEK?! I was dumbfounded, what on earth did i get myself caught into. I placed my hands and forehead on the wall, it was extremely cool to the touch and helped calm me down slightly. I sighed out and cracked my neck ”No rest for the wicked I guess” I followed down the hall to where Sapphire went, lo and behold I found what she was talking about. A long table adorned with plates, dishes, silverware and candles. As soon as I stepped in I could feel the eyes of everyone inside. THEY ALL LOOKED THE SAME Cat girls that looked like Sapphire but with different colored hair or eyes to the left. To the right were different girls that looked distinctly dog like. All of them ranged in age from young to teens to even adults. But the most prominent eyes that stared at me, and I back, was a man with a skin tone like mine only darker. His head was shaved but he had scruff on his chin. He eyes had little color to them, almost milky. The kind of milky that blind people have. To his left was the oldest looking cat girl, with short brown hair and brown eyes. To his right was the oldest looking dog girl, with jet black fur and hair down past her shoulders. Everyone had different emotions across their faces. Some were confused, some unhappy, some (like sapphire) with a weird glazed over look or twinkle in their eyes. But the man had the strangest look. He had his hands on his chin and a wide smile “Welcome my guest, to Grey Gardens. Home of Clan Darkstar” |
MoniStarApr 20, 2015 6:08 PM
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| An interesting idea to pay homage to tyger's story and use it as a starting point. His story was one that shaped the world and certainly one of the most respected ones. I also like how you described the confusion from the 'transport" |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
| I did a lot of laughing out loud at this chapter -- I think you've got the humor part down, Moni. Some moments that I particularly enjoyed: ”Would you like to put our hands down or do you want us to continue admiring what the Ancients have given you?” I love Sapphire's attitude here. It's just the right mixture of cute and spoiled. I think you mean "put your hands down," however. What the hell? Why did she kiss me? Why did she stop? What is going on? I must be crazy Father? A WEEK?! Yup. That is the right way to convey incredulity. And I must say that I'm looking forward to meeting these secondary characters you're creating. Ancestors know that I didn't name all of the liberated soldiers of Nefer-Apep, let alone the refugees who showed up during the war. One quibble, however: To his left was the oldest looking cat girl, with short brown hair and brown eyes. To his right was the oldest looking dog girl, with jet black fur and hair down past her shoulders. If this passage refers to my lovely brides, Aneksi is actually a brown-eyed blond. If it refers to the oldest daughters currently residing at Gray Gardens (Talwar and Topaz), no worries. |
tygertygerApr 20, 2015 6:08 PM
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| Definitely looking to see where this all runs. I like the overall lightness so far with the chance to establish the characters. Seems like the desert is really heating up! No...no, I apologize for that uninspired attempt at a pun. =P Despite the short reload time, it feels like there is already a good amount of thought going into the characters. |
| 3rd Tune: Natalie I always did suffer from stage fright, granted this time I kept my bladder under control lest I repeat the incident of ‘99…. never again. The stares of the company of cat and dog girls plus the gaze of the man across of me made me feel like the new kid being thrown into the unforgiving waters of a new school… only this school was filled with females as far as the eyes could see. “Welcome to…” The man was about to speak but I put my hand up before rubbing my temples ”I heard ya, I heard ya…. I’m trying to wrap my head around this” ”Our guest finally woke up and I thought it would be in good taste to show him around gardens” Sapphire was quick to assigning herself as my guide… that was until her sisters (as I could assume) stepped in ”Please sister, we all know you just want to put your claim as his mate in first.” ”That’s playing dirty, you know there aren’t many men around so you pounced on the first man that comes by” ”Sapphire has always been a sneaky on, I should know since i’m her yearmate” The company of girls started arguing while sapphire turned to me and stuck out her tongue. You sly cat I wanted to say something outloud but then the headaches started again Everything went fuzzy and blank until the scene changed. White noise A boy and a girl Both of their faces blacked out again but I could tell the boy was me. he was moving sporadically, like he was yelling. The girl had her arms crossed but not in an aggressive way, in a defensive kind of way. The boy’s movements got wider and wilder. The voices weren’t audible but the movements told everything. The girl tried to shrink more and more into her protective shell she created but the boy kept getting madder and madder SMACK The girl hit the boy. Both freeze in place, in horror and shock. The girl takes a step towards the boy but the boy moves away. He puts his hands up in defense. white noise ***** My eyes started to flutter as the picture before me started to change from fuzzy to focused. Every girl in the dining room before hand was hovering over me. The man was looking the most intensely… or lack of looking since I could tell he couldn’t see me well with his strange milky eyes. ”Can I get some space, I’m claustrophobic” ”What does that mean?” Asked the littlest dog girl. She was soon picked up by an older looking dog girl with dark hair ”It means he’s a big baby who hates small spaces” I groaned and slowly got up as soon as the crowd of girls separated. The man coughed into his hand to get everyone’s attention “Well, since we’ve had breakfast and a show” I dryly laughed “Let’s get on with today’s activities. We have a big show coming up and we have to get everything ready for it. You all know your tasks so let’s get to it.” He clapped and the crowd dispersed, leaving me, sapphire, the dog girl who insulted my pride was holding onto the smaller dog girl, the man and his apparent wives as they were attached to his hip while staring at me. “Since I hadn’t taken into account another man to fall from the sky and end up in my home, Sapphire and Misericordia can walk you around the Grey Gardens since they aren’t the busiest. Though I will need them back before the show” ”Show?” ”The man in front of you is one of the biggest superstars in the land. The Great Darkstar!” The girl’s description about her father got at most a shrug of my shoulders before I got up fully. Before I could move something squishy pressed itself against my arm. I looked down to see Sapphire clinging to me like a parasite to its symbiote, with a large smile on her face. ”We have a lot to see today so we should get going. Try to keep us Cordia” The dog girl scoffed and rolled her eyes but my attention was quickly taken away as I was dragged back into the hallway. ***** ”And in here is Clan Darkstar’s most precious items, the instruments. We have a large collection of classic instruments to some of the more regal to even ones from a group of travelers who claim to be from a different world, such as yourself.” The room was filled with lavender and grey rugs and a literal fuckton of instruments. Sapphire wasn’t kidding about that. The amount of walking room was miniscule as the whole room was split, sections of woodwind instruments, brass, and even some from my time. Sapphire had left my side and Misericordia stood next to her as I started to inspect every instrument. My eyes fell upon one of the instruments from my time, an acoustic guitar. I picked up the wooden instrument and suddenly i started to remember, the boy from before only shorter, he was in a room filled with various posters, sitting on a bed, playing a guitar. I pulled the cord around my neck, strummed the strings and I started playing A few kicks on the ground, and I started humming before I lost focus and started playing [i] Oh, I never done this before Never wanna do this again Wrong turn on a dusty road I did it to myself, I can't pretend Well, I learned just a little too late Good God, I must've been blind 'Cause she got me for everything, everything, everything, alright Like my daddy I'm a gambling man Never been afraid to roll the dice But when I put my bet on her Little Miss Snake eyes ruined my life She better sleep with one eye open Better make sure to lock her doors 'Cause once I get my hands on her, Imma oh Natalie She ran away with all my money And she did it for fun Natalie She's probably out there thinking it's funny Telling everyone Well, I'm digging a ditch For this gold-digging bitch Watch out She's quick Look out for a pretty little thing named Natalie If you see her tell her I'm coming She better run The good lord better bless your soul 'Cause I done already cursed your name Don't matter which way you go Payback's gonna come your way You'll be begging me, please, please, please And now I look at you and laugh, laugh, laugh While you sit there and cry for me, cry for me, cry for me all night I spend a lifetime in jail (yeah, that's what I'll do) I'll be smiling in my cell (yeah, thinking bout you) Can't nobody save you now So there ain't no use in trying Once I get my hands on you, Imma oh Natalie She ran away with all my money And she did it for fun Natalie She's probably out there thinking it's funny Telling everyone Well, I'm digging a ditch For this gold-digging bitch Watch out She's quick Look out for a pretty little thing named Natalie If you see her tell her I'm coming She better run I should've known better (I should've known better) 'cause when we were together ('cause when we were together) She never said forever (she never said forever) I'm a fool that played in her game, hey Natalie She ran away with all my money And she did it for fun Natalie She's probably out there thinking it's funny Telling everyone Well, I'm digging a ditch For this gold-digging bitch Watch out She's quick Look out for a pretty little thing named Natalie If you see her tell her I'm coming She better run [/i] I opened my eyes and instead of just Sapphire and Misericordia, I had an entire audience of various monster girls and the man from before. I was speechless until they all started clapping “Wow…. that was simply wow” All of the other monster girls agreed and started shouting praise and asking for encores. It showed but I felt my face turn hot with embarrassment. ”T...thanks. Its just something I learned a while back. I still can’t remember anything but just touching the guitar made me remember some parts of my memory.” The man started stroking his chin before a wide smile appeared on his face “I think we found an opening act for tonight. Zahra, can you get our guest something to wear and an instrument and get him ready? Oh yes this is a great idea. I hope you remember more songs young man because you are now in tonight’s show” ”Huh?” |
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| Aww hells, opening for the Darkstar?! That's like instant stardom if you don't botch the whole thing. Break a leg or 4--the people of in that war-torn region could use something good. =) |
| 4th Tune: Sing Being in a daze was an understatement. I felt like the world was moving a million miles around me and I was just stuck. A girl with bee wings and a small stinger took me by the hand and flew me from one room to another. I felt like a human doll, being stripped by strangers, sized up by different girls of different species. A spider girl took my measurements, granted not without a fight. After getting in a tugging match with the spider girl and tied up while she created an outfit my size and using clothes already in the room. I was outfitted with a pair of black cotton pants, black boots with red soles and a black long sleeve shirt. To finish the outfit she wrapped my waist in a bright red sash. After my outfit was created the same bee girl returned and pulled me to another room. With a large mirror and a chair with various cases and bottles I could tell it was a makeup station No no no nope nein. I refuse to wear make-up I may have fought with the spider girl but I was about to smack the monster girl who had ridiculously long hair who was in charge of making me ‘presentable’ All in one day, i’ve been tied up twice and experimented on for a concert I wasn’t ok with. But i’ll give it to the hair girl, she made my normally dull black eyes pop like fireworks What am I saying…. but…. I shake my head but quickly stop as I feel my hair being pulled back. The hair girl quickly tied my longish dreads into a ponytail, albeit rather forcefully. ”Can you be any gentler?! ”If a certain someone didn’t try to kick me in the stomach then i’d be more gentle, be lucky I only pulled your hair a little.” I grumbled but she was right. As if on a timer the bee girl reappeared, but with Sapphire coming in behind her ”He looks good” The bee girl complimented me, causing me to turn slightly red ”He looked good before, now he looks down right gorgeous” Sapphire added. Make that slightly red to a bright, beet red. ”Now time for you to be fitted with our special sound devices. Follow me.” Sound devices? I was grabbed by the bee girl but I was able to walk on my own for once as we left the hair girl and went into a room that was filled with more instruments but also a stage in the back. The most notable feature was an ass…. a literal ass shaking in the air as the rest of the body was hidden within a chest. I had no words… words had literally failed me. The bee girl tapped the butt, causing me to say nemo under my breath. When the person the ass belonged to didn’t budge the bee girl grabbed his waist and pulled up one male wearing overalls and huge, oversized glasses. His dusty blond hair covered part of his glasses but he had very distinct, green eyes. ”Wha… oh Zahra, I didn’t see you there. What’s up?” The man was obviously in a world of his own as he didn’t notice Sapphire or I. Zahra cleared her throat before focusing on me ”This is Chris, he is performing before Tony and I want to get him fitted with a microphone” ”Wait, you have microphones?” ”You could call it that. It’s really simple. My partner is a sylph, a wind spirit and I learned from someone how to created a device that amplifies sound with wind to project a voice within a wide range, creating a microphone like necklace that just requires you to talk and it has similar effects. I’ve been messing with them and may have created something better.” He was very…. VERY focused on his inventions and trying to teach me about how he has created a microphone in this world… wherever this world is. He attached one of the necklaces to me, it was a simple crystal that hung over my black shirt. I was about to speak but he quickly put his hand over my mouth ”I wouldn’t do that, not in here. The power of the microphone could probably, most likely ruin our ear drums.” I nodded and he removed his hand. An idea came to me and I removed the necklace. ”You aren’t from around here, have you ever heard of a synthesizer?” He must have and it must have greatly intrigued him as he grabbed me by my shoulders and started shaking. ”I HAVE! I HAVE HEARD OF IT AND I HAVE CREATED SOMETHING TO THAT EFFECT! FINALLY SOMEONE WHO WANTS TO SEE MY INVENTION AND NOT CALL ME CRAZY!” ”Oh everyone knows you are crazy. And I’m a sylph so I know crazy.” A small fairy like girl appeared from behind the instruments before landing on the boy’s head. ”Shut it Mami. What do you want a synthesizer for?” The boy quickly focused back on me as he stared at me with brighter ambition ” I hate the fact that I’m forced into this concert but I have an idea and if you have a synthesizer or something like it, It could help me out” The boy turned around and began shuffling throughout the chest he was in before hand ”I have created something like a synthesizer. Tony is very old school so he doesn’t want to use it but it can replay any sounds it records as long as you press the pedal once to record and again to stop the recording.” The boy pulled out another crystal but it was attached to what looked like stand. At the bottom was two pedal like things. ”Does it work? ”Oh it work” Sapphire rested her head on my shoulders as I finally realized this whole time she was clinging to me ”I wonder what you are planning chris… but I do hope you know what you are doing.” I chuckled as I had no idea what I was doing. But I prayed that this would work. Zahra took the old school synthesizer and the necklace from me and turned around. Within a second a girl dressed like she was a ninja appeared from thin air. ”WHAT THE FUCK?! A NINJA!” The masked ninja girl rolled her eyes and turned back to the bee girl ”What would you like me to do Miss Zahra?” ”Take this to the stage and set it up for Chris, and bring the acoustic guitar Jezebel.” ”If it is your will.” The ninja girl grabbed the items and disappeared as quickly as she appeared. Zahra grabbed me by the sleeve and started to pull me out of the room again. I put my hand up and turned back to the boy ”Thanks for the help… uh…” ”My name is Liam, and don’t worry about it. Hope you kill the show. ”Y..yeah.” Zahra pulled me again and we left the instrument room. We passed the previous rooms, and before we left the spider girl stopped me again and pulled me back into her room ”On second thought, the sash is too flamboyant. I have something from my husband that may work instead.” She ripped the sash off and took the opportunity to pull my shirt over my head. I could feel her running her hand over my body which made me cringe. My reaction must have been funny as I heard her laugh before I yanked my shirt back down. In her hand was a red, grey and black flannel like button up shirt. ”Wait, you have flannels in this world too?” ”No, but this was similar to what my husband was wearing when he arrived. That and some dull shirt that had holes in it. I hated that outfit so much when I met him I tore it off him and had my way with him until the early morning. But this outer shirt was his favorite so I learned how to create it. I’ve made dozens of them so it’s nothing new to me.” I could have done without the backstory but I was surprised at the amount of people from my world was very strange. ”Plus you there is only 5 more males from the otherworld, just so you know” I swear she could read my mind and it was extremely annoying and creepy but I couldn’t focus on it as Zahra dragged me from the room and down the hall. We reached a the exit of the manor and she led me down a path to what looked like an outdoor festival grounds. Tarps everywhere and the smell of different foods and spices filled the air. ”As much as I am against this, no one ever told me what is going on here.” ”It’s the anniversary of when my father and my mother’s settled in the grey gardens. Every year we put on a festival to celebrate the fact we have this oasis, especially after the war.” War? I wanted to ask more about it but I was dragged again by Zahra. We walked down the rest of the path to what looked like a stage. Zahra led me to the back of it, a large tent covered with grey and gold tassels. We walked inside and the man was there again, with his wives, Sapphire’s mom and probably stepmom, as well the rest of the girls from before. “Welcome back young man, I do hope you are ready” ”I really hope you don’t do this to everyone who appears in this place. This is probably on the top ten strangest things to ever happen to me… and my name is..” ”His name is Chris father.” Sapphire quickly cut me off and when I looked at her she just stuck her tongue out at me. I sighed and the man couldn’t help but chuckle “Oh do not worry. I have a very good feeling about this, just sing like you did before and don’t focus on the crowd.” ”Easy when you don’t have the ability to see.” I snidely said under my breath, thought it was loud enough for me to get dirty looks from about half of the girls in the tent. ”It’s time. We need you on stage now Chris.” ”You’ll do fine.” Sapphire said as she hugged me. I could not read this girl at all, what did she want from me? I shook my head to free my thoughts as followed Zahra. “Break a leg.” The man said “YOU DIDN’T SAY WHOSE.” The whole tent replied. I could deal without it but I just gulped and followed Zahra out of the back of the tent. We walked to set of wooden stairs and a screen. Zahra pulled the screen back and handed me the acoustic guitar I used before. I examined it again and dug my nails in the wood on the face. I dug my nails through it until a messy ‘x’ appeared on the face. ”Don’t worry. If Tony believes in you then so do the rest of us… Plus you have a special gift.” ”Let’s hope that gift shows up again.” I walked out onto the stage. A couple of lights shone down on me. The lights were blinding and my heart was beating so fast it felt like it was going to burst out of my chest. As I took the stage I say the crowd of people. It was a large crowd. It was bigger than large. It felt like a million eyes were focusing on me. I could hear different voices from the crowd. “That isn’t darkstar.” “He is kinda cute.” “Let’s hope he doesn’t fuck up.” “Maybe he should fuck up, I haven’t had a good laugh in a while.” Oh good god… please help me I swallowed and walked to the center of the stage. On the synthesizer hung the necklace. I grabbed it and put it on before putting on the guitar. I had never thought in my wildest dreams would I ever end up like this. Not even in my craziest dreams. ”Uh” Uh “Hi” Hi “M...my name is Chris. I’m here to welcome d...darkstar by playing a few songs. I hope you… you… you all enjoy” My heart was beating faster and faster with every passing second. I grabbed the pick from the guitar and strummed the guitar. I slowly started to calm down and I just did as I did before. Now I’m in town, break it down, thinking of making a new sound Playing a different show every night in front of a new crowd That’s you now, ciao, seems that life is great now See me lose focus, as I sing to you loud And I can’t, no, I won’t hush I’ll say the words that make you blush I’m gonna sing this now Oh oh See, I’m true, my songs are where my heart is I’m like glue, I stick to other artists I’m not you, now that would be disastrous Let me sing and do my thing and move to greener pastures See, I’m real, I do it all, it’s all me I’m not fake, don’t ever call me lazy I won’t stay put, give me the chance to be free Suffolk sadly seems to sort of suffocate me ‘Cause you need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me I sing and write my own tune and I write my own verse Hell, don't need another word-smith to make my tune sell Call yourself a singer-writer - you’re just bluffing Your name’s on the credits and you didn’t write nothing I sing fast, I know that all my shit’s cool I will blast and I didn’t go to Brit School I came fast with the way I act, right I can’t last if I’m smoking on a crack pipe And I won’t be a product of my genre My mind will always be stronger than my songs are Never believe the bullshit that fake guys feed to ya Always read the stories that you hear on Wikipedia And musically I’m demonstrating When I perform live, feels like I am meditating Times at the Enterprise when some fella filmed me ‘A young singer-writer like Gabriella Cilmi’ ‘Cause you need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me I felt… I felt great. I looked up from playing and everyone in the crowd was loving it. Monster girls were dancing and bouncing to the music. I felt myself smile brightly. I… I… I 'Cause with the lyrics I’ll be aiming it right I won’t stop 'til my name's in lights At stadium heights with Damien Rice On red carpets, now I’m on Arabian Nights Because I’m young I know my brother's gonna give me advice Long nighter, short height and I gone hyper Never be anything but a singer-songwriter, yeah. The game's over but now I’m on a new level Watch how I step on the track without a loop pedal People think that I’m bound to blow up I’ve done around about a thousand shows But I haven’t got a house plus I live on a couch So you believe the lyrics when I’m singing them out, wow From day one, I’ve been prepared With vo5 wax for my long ass hair So now I’m back to the sofa, giving a dose of what the future holds 'Cause it’s another day Plus I'll keep my last name forever keep the genre pretty basic Gonna be breaking into other people’s tunes when I chase it And replace it with the elephant in the room with a facelift Into another rapper's shoes using new laces I'm selling CDs from my rucksack aiming for the papers Selling CDs from my rucksack aiming for the majors Nationwide tour with Just Jack, still had to get the bus back Clean cut kid without a razor for the mustache I hit back when the pen hurts me I’m still a choir boy in a Fenchurch tee I’m still the same as a year ago But more people hear me though According to the MySpace and YouTube videos I’m always doing shows if I’m not I’m in the studio Truly broke, never growing up call me Rufio Melody music maker Reading all the papers They say I’m up and coming like I'm fucking in an elevator . 'Cause you need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you You need me, man, I don’t need you at all You need me, man, I don’t need you I strummed the last note and held my guitar up high. My breath was ragged and fast and my heart was beating insanely but I wasn’t scared or shy anymore. I was happy. I was ecstatic. The whole crowd was on there feet clapping, cheering, I even heard a whistle or two. I turned and saw Sapphire with a wide smile. In fact her whole family was smiling at me. I saw the man, Darkstar, the apparent legend of Grey Gardens and he was clapping in applause. I turned back to the crowd and bowed before putting the necklace towards my lips. ”Thank you all so much. I would love to play again but it’s time for the man you have been waiting for.” I was about to turn towards the tent but I couldn’t. The crowd wasn’t cheering for Darkstar, they were cheering for an encore. They wanted me to play more. I was speechless, out of breath, sweaty and engorged with so many emotions. I turned back to the tent looking for answers and all I got was Darkstar mouthing me to play another. I nodded and pulled my guitar back up, the crowd responded with more cheering ”I have time for one more song and I’ll need you all to help me with it.” I started strumming the notes to another song I knew. This feeling… Words couldn’t describe it accurately but I felt something. This was truly awesome. It's late in the evening Glass on the side I've been sat with you For most of the night Ignoring everybody here We wish they would disappear So maybe we could get down now |
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| I love this chapter! The anniversary festival is a great idea, and of course a clan of performers would regard musical instruments as treasure. I particularly enjoy how the characters that you've created have been integrated so well with the characters from the source material. Seeing stuff like this is the kind of thing that makes writing in a shared universe so rewarding. Mad props, Moni! |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| When I've read the first chapter I didn't expected that you will actually build up and expand the setting that Tyger created in first story. Interesting. Keep it up. |
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beast_regards said: When I've read the first chapter I didn't expected that you will actually build up and expand the setting that Tyger created in first story. I know, right? I really like how this is playing out. Of course, now I'm wondering what song Tony and Chris will decide on for their duet... 'cause you know there has to be one. The audience demands it! |
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tygertyger said: beast_regards said: When I've read the first chapter I didn't expected that you will actually build up and expand the setting that Tyger created in first story. I know, right? I really like how this is playing out. Of course, now I'm wondering what song Tony and Chris will decide on for their duet... 'cause you know there has to be one. The audience demands it! you're gonna have to call his agent first *ring ring* Hello, Darkstar? Yes, i'd like to have yourself and [insert stage name soon to be revealed] to do a duet. Oh, he'll do it for free since he has no freedom of choice in show matters? great! |
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| Intriguing, unique, music themed story with Tunes instead of chapter and focus shifted away from usual adventure. I must say, I love it. I don't understand what "part 3" in the title means? Where is part 2 or part 1? Am I reading this in wrong order? |
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| Aww yess. I think the next logical step in this magical-science-for-the-right-reasons is to figure out how to handle a distortion pedal. As for a duet...why do I feel like something in the blues neighborhood falls somewhere between those two styles? Could just be my fantasy =) tterreb said: Moni enjoys randomly abandoning his stories regardless of his readers' feelings... I miss Piper... :( And we all miss Payton, but sometimes things just happen...or don't? Hard to say. |
| Chapter 5: The Trial of Memory Part 1 The desert heat shone through the opaque shades, nullifying their purpose and lighting up my face. I could feel the rays heating up my face and while I was ok being already darker than most people, I would rather not turn pitch black. I turned to my side and started to open my eyes when my vision was flooded with the image of a sleeping girl inches from my face. ”Why”, I groaned as I started to sit up, trying to not stir my sleeping companion ”Because I have decided that you are my habib roohi and I need to be with you all the time”, she replied as she started to yawn. I turned back to see her stretch just like a cat… a cat with two large globes on her chest that swayed and bounced with her breath. I started to turn red and looked away, but not fast enough for Sapphire to notice. I heard the bed squeak as she stalked over to me until she was pressed against my back. Her breath attacking my neck as she sexily talked ”What’s wrong habib roohi? All that is mine is yours just as all that is yours is mine…. and I mean everything~” No matter how much I tried to not notice, I had no choice but to feel the soft texture of her body against my back. I could feel two small nubs running against my rhomboids and my little buddy was starting to perk up ”Sorry to interrupt you this morning Mistress Sapphire but your mothers called for you.” Thank you Cleo. With a huff, Sapphire got up and grabbed the shirt I wore last night and placed it on her slender body, the article of clothing hanging two sizes bigger than her and started to leave. Before she exited my room she turned and blew me a kiss and winked before strutting down the hall. I could only respond my sighing but I perked up as I heard another sigh. I looked up and say Cleopatra, the captain of the guard sighing and shaking her head ”I’m glad she is finally interested in finding a mate but I wish she would slow down a little.” ”Have you known her long?” I got up and invited Cleo in as I started to change from just the silk boxers and shirt I was sleeping in to something more suitable. ”I’ve served this family for a long time, long before Lady Aneski was pregnant with her first child. You may not know this but the land was torn by a civil war. The Grey Gardens were a save haven for refugees and orphans but also a major target for thieves and bandits. I came here with a small group of survivors from a town and helped defend this place we call home. Since then I have served as Guard Captain and watched this place grow. I like to think of the little ones as my own daughters.” Cleo looked… at peace as she told her story. I somewhat felt bad for half paying attention as I put on the same black pants but put on a red shirt and a green military-esque hooded jacket I stole from Spinderella’s room after the show. I hate spiders but she does have a lot of fashion items from my world ”But…” I turned as I felt her eyes stare into my soul ”If a certain man were to hurt my precious Sapphire’s feelings, I wouldn’t hesitate to drag him through the desert and forest and toss him to a pit of tentacle girls and watch as his every orifice is penetrated by a slimy tentacle.” I nodded in agreement, trying my best to banish any idea of what that meant. Before I could react, Cleo pinned me against the wall and held me trapped between her more than gifted physique and the hard wall. I struggled to move and succeeded in moving my arm only to have her twist me and my arm and pin me again. Shit I felt her bare down on me more before whispering in my ear ”Too weak… too weak to be with any of the girls, and you call yourself a man. Maybe I should take you here and show you who is the real man around here.” I tried to move around and felt… oh god Please god no. Something hard was hitting my back and it didn’t feel like a sword hilt. ” DO YOU HAVE A?!” I couldn’t finish my sentence as I felt her scaled hand rocket into my gut, robbing me of air and my ability to breath temporarily ”Don’t you know you never ask a lady those questions? It’s not very polite” She teased as I tried to breath. Just taking in air felt painful for what felt like forever. As I started to breath again Cleo grabbed my shoulder and pulled me up, opening up my lungs and allowed air to flow again ”All jokes aside, Master Tony called for you.” ******* ”You want me to what?!” In the private chamber of one of the watchtowers Tony, Cleo, Myself and Tony’s anubis wife Beset convened. “Beset and some of the girls believe you aren’t man enough to be with my daughter and want to test you in, what they call, The Trials.” Tony said as he tried to sound as apologetic as he could. ”Why? I just got here and I’m already being forced onto your daughter?” “I personally don’t agree with it, plus I need you to practice more for your next show but they say it is of importance sooooo” As Tony talked on I started to realize a lever next to his Anubis wife’s paw hand. No ”So we are sending you into the labyrinthian underground of the Grey Gardens. Make it up within a week and you will see if you are man enough to wed my daughter” For a brief second it looked like she smiled as she pulled the lever. The rest of my vision began to blur as my body fell due to lack of ground to stand on. It wasn’t long before I hit the sandy ground below me but I could tell it was a drop since the light from above was already dimmed “I WISH YOU LUCK CHRIS, I’D HATE TO SEE A GOOD ACT SUCH AS YOURSELF END UP DEAD! OH YEAH YOU’LL NEED THIS!” A glimmer appeared above and I moved in time before being skewered by a black katana that fell from above ”WHY WOULD I NEED THIS?!” I shouted back ”You’ll find out” I didn’t like the snicker I heard from Cleo and the laugh from Beset. As my eyes got adjusted to the dark, torches began to illuminate the area I was in. A circular room with 5 doors. On each door appeared a symbol on it, each symbol being different from the last. ”Where the hell am I?” ”You are in my main chamber, young tifl” I pulled a complete 360, only to find myself all alone ”You amuse me young tifl, you cannot see me but I am everywhere. What am I?” ”I’m not one for riddles, but i’m guessing some spirit or god” The room went silent as I grabbed the katana and shook off the sand from its blade. ”Hahaha You just made a sphinx very horny with that answer. But you are correct, I am the spirit of the Grey Gardens. You have been sent into the deep chambers of my desert fortress to complete the trials. Inside each of my chambers are…” ”Look, can you give me a short version. I’m in a bad mood as is and would like to be spared a history lesson.” ”my my~ I do admire your moxy tifl. I shall honor your request, inside each of these rooms lies a challenge. You shall complete the challenges or you will be swallowed by the challenges and completely destroyed, body and spirit. Good luck tifl~” Great… First I get thrown down here after being mocked for not being a man and now I have a week to complete… 6 challenges? I placed my hand over the bridge of my nose, a habit I developed a long time ago. As if on cue, a door creaked open, sand and a strange purple smoke began to seep out. ”I’m going to hate this aren’t I?” ”You will have to decide that for yourself” On my list of worst days ever, this was definitely up there. Along side the plane crash… plane crash? My head started to get fuzzy, as if the room was calling to me and it was messing with my brain. Against every gut feeling to not go in, I took one step, then another. The smoke started to look like a hand beckoning me inside. The smoke smelled of… burning metal and flesh. ”Good luck young tifl… good luck indeed” |
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beast_regards said: It's hard to believe tyger would establish such a trials Yeeeaaah... remember in my first story when I mentioned my college theater instructor? |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| I love this entire premise. Forced to endure the deadly trials for the right to be with a girl you may or may not want. Definitely a more interesting way for dad to be cleaning the shotgun when the boys start coming around. Can't wait to see what sort of trials the glorious hero will overcome to claim his princess! And if something goes wrong there's always that tentacle option. |
| From idol-like music performance right into the dungeon to prove the worth for the princess. Even episode is called "chapter" and not "tune" anymore. Is it really worth it turning the unique art-themed story down to the run-of-the-mill fantasy adventure? In my humble opinion, this change of direction is a a bit disappointing. |
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Malise said: From idol-like music performance right into the dungeon to prove the worth for the princess. Even episode is called "chapter" and not "tune" anymore. Is it really worth it turning the unique art-themed story down to the run-of-the-mill fantasy adventure? In my humble opinion, this change of direction is a a bit disappointing. oh don't worry, there will be more performances i just have the trials as a divider between performances and they will serve a purpose in the future. The ballad of darkstar and chris [insert stage name] will continue |
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MoniStar said: i just have the trials as a divider between performances and they will serve a purpose in the future. The ballad of darkstar and chris [insert stage name] will continue I would suggest name it intermezzo or something to keep the theme :) |
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| Lol, the Grey Gardens just lost their status as a 'safe haven'. Guess we should move it to Kaori. |
| Oh, it's plenty safe. I just didn't specify for whom. };) |
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tygertyger said: Oh, it's plenty safe. I just didn't specify for whom. };) For that I'm now supporting ship: 'aces the trial; dumps the girl; she blames parents; all hell breaks loose'. That should teach those nosey parents not to meddle with other people's affairs. :-P |
| Trial of Memory Part 2: Learn From The Past Everything seemed, hazy. The kind of hazy you experience in first person shooters after surviving a grenade explosion. The kind of hazy you get after pulling all nighters for college with zero caffeine in your system. The constant scent of burning meat and metal made me feel nauseous enough to throw up. The more I walked, the more the scent grew stronger until it felt like the scent was a muck that was on my body and that it would never wash away. What do you mean you slept with him?! “What… who is there?” I was met with absolute silence. The smoke was starting to burn my eyes but it looked like two figures standing before me “Who are you two?” The figures didn’t respond. They didn’t acknowledge me and went on with what they were doing. Answer me ________! Why aren’t you answering me?! Wait….. That voice… Because ______ I don’t love you anymore. You change your mind so much and you don’t listen to me at all Those two things have nothing in common! And I do listen to you! You don’t say anything to me! And when you do talk to me for the first time in forever you tell me that you slept with another guy! Don’t try to put this on me I WILL WHEN YOU ARE BEING A COLOSSAL WHORE I… I remember this. It was the last fight I had with my ex girlfriend. She… she… Don’t talk to me like that Christian! I WILL TALK ANYWAY I WANT! DON’T TALK ME TO EVER AGAIN YOU SLUT! I HOPE YOU BURN IN HELL YOU WHORE I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN One of the non-corporal figures smacked the other across the face that made a loud sound for a spectral figure. Suddenly I felt a stinging sensation in my cheek. That was me getting smacked. The smoke started to fade and I see it clearly, a younger me standing with an expression of pure shock, holding my cheek. A smaller girl with dirty blonde and black hair fighting back tears stood before me. You are the worst person Christian… Never talk to me again.” The young me just stood there. I always looked ugly when I cried and the memory of this incident… it felt like I was there… The pain, betrayal, the stinging feeling in my face and the stinging in my chest. I closed my eyes and turned away but my younger figure appeared before me “What the hell?” I turned away only to be met with another vision of myself. “Holy fuck” I kept turning and was met each time with another version of my past self until I was surrounded by dozens of my past life staring at me It’s not my fault it’s hers She just justified being a whore I’m not to blame Why me Why She is the one at fault I hope she feels this pain I want her to feel this pain I want to see the look on her face when she suffers “Stop…” My head began pounding as the bodies began to entrap me, coming closer and closer with each thought. Rather than a headache it felt like my head was being split open We should kill her Kill her Kill her! KILL HER! “No… Stop!” With one hand on my head and my vision fading I forgot I was holding the sword Cleo dropped until I sliced a spectral figure of me and it vanished into smoke. “That’s not me…. That’s not what I think” It is We are your anger We are your rage We are your vengeance We are We are We are “Shut up! I am not like that… any… any more” All I could do is slash wildly as each figure crept closer and closer Everyone hurts us Father hurt us I slash at a figure that turned into an exact replica of my dad. His head hitting the ground before turning into smoke. Mother hurt us I cut a figure down in half as the figure turned into my mother being turning into smoke Abby hurt us I turned one hundred and eighty degrees and attempted to strike down the figure until I froze over. It was an exact image of my ex… the last woman I loved. Her steely blue eyes penetrated my very core. Everything about her looked exactly as she was the second to last day I saw her. I couldn’t bring myself to strike down Give in The copy of Abby grabbed my neck and rather than feeling like smoke, it was real. The soft feel of her palms as they gripped around my neck and started to squeeze Give in Give in! GIVE IN! The headache became colossal, my vision was turning into a blur, everything was going black. “N...N…..NEVER!” With the last of my strength I tightened my grip on the sword and stabbed in front of me. The look of rage turned into shock on Abby's face. She looked down as the blade was sticking inside of her right above her left breast. She looked up at me once more before turning into smoke, leaving me alone in the smoke filled room. I felt like passing out, the scent was getting to me so much I stumbled forward. Reaching out I felt something hit against my forearm and move until I heard a thud and a crash. Almost as if on cue my hearing heard the sound of stone being moved and the smoke began to dissipate. I could see clearly for once. I was about to walk but stopped as I noticed a small stone pillar about scrotum high that would have given my boys a special surprise if I took another step. On the other side of the pillar was the shattered remains of a clay pot with a strange pink powder spilled out on the floor. ”Good job tifi, you have passed the first challenge.” The grey gardens spoke in my mind, something not entirely safe after the head splitting migraine I just suffered “First challenge?” ”The first of about 3 challenges. When I came to being I had set these up to find worthy leaders but I haven’t had anyone attempt my trials in years. It feels rather nostalgic and good to have a young man inside me again.” Oh my god. ”Why do I have to do these? I don’t want to become leader here” ”Then what do you want to do tifi?” I couldn’t answer. I thought about it but since arriving here I’ve just gone with the flow, even if it was against my will. Did I want to return to my home? A home without Abby? Did I want to stay? I mean here I have a girl that is pretty much head over heels for me even if it’s annoying. There I have nothing. Here I have monstergirls… there I have nothing. ”I… I don’t know…” ”Because you are young, because you have no backbone… because you are a coward. Until then I shall hold off on these next challenges.” Suddenly a door opened across from me, lighten up by torches that revealed stairs. ”Wait… you are just letting me go? ”Yes” ”What if I don’t want to come back” ”Oh you will… whether you want to or not” ”And if I just run away and never return?” ”You’ll be surprised how far my grasp reaches in this desert Tifi. You cannot escape from fate once you have entered my domain.” I had nothing. I had something, the remains of a splitting headache, a broken ego since I was told I wasn’t man enough to finish a stupid trial I was forced into and a raising temper. I sighed and began the walk of shame up the stairs until it took me to a door. As I opened the door I was met with the arms and furry embrace of Sapphire tackling me and squeezing me in a bear hug. ”I’m so happy you are ok my moon and stars…” Wait… was that a Game of Thrones reference? ”When I heard my step-mother threw you into the labyrinth I thought you would never return” That felt like a dagger being thrust into me. Soon the room began to fill with the others as Tony, Beset, Sapphire’s mother, Aneski, and a small handful of Sapphire’s sister and step sisters. ”Welcome back. You are a little early. Did you finish everything?” Something about her tone… it was another dagger. ”He didn’t. The gardens aren’t allowing him to proceed” And another. ”All of you stop making fun of him! I’m perfectly fine if he isn’t the next leader.” And another. I could feel that the girls in the room started arguing, either taking Beset and Cleo’s side or taking Sapphire’s side as the two groups started to bicker but everything turned white noise as the proverbial bomb fuse got shorter and shorter and shorter and shorter until… ”ALL OF YOU SHUT UP!” The room went dead silent as my outburst rang in the room. ”ALL OF THIS NOISE NOISE NOISE! WHEN DID ANYONE THINK ABOUT WHAT I WANTED! I GOT TELEPORTED HERE AGAINST MY WILL! I’VE HAD TO PERFORM IN A CONCERT AGAINST MY WILL! I’M BEING FORCED TO TAKE THESE STUPID TRIALS AGAINST MY WILL! AND IT FEELS LIKE I’M BEING FORCED INTO A MARRIAGE AGAINST MY WILL WHEN I LITERALLY WAS BROKEN HEARTED NOT LONG BEFORE I GOT HERE! WHEN DID MY LIFE BECOME SOMETHING THAT WASN’T MINE!” The words literally flowed out with no thought as I shouted my rage and frustration out. I had all this pent up rage and anger that just exploded after the final straw was broken. When it was all said and done, I just stood there, eyes to the ceiling, huffing and shaking from the aftermath. I could feel Sapphire’s grip loosen enough around me to the point where I could move and move I did. Pushing past her and anyone in my way I walked, and walked, and walked until I reach my temporary room. I opened the wooden door and slammed it almost immediately as I stepped through. Why always me ********* I don’t remember what happened but I opened my eyes and was greeted with the moon and stars hanging outside my window like it was a painting. My eyes stung and felt dry. I looked down and saw stains on the pillow reminiscent of tears against the fabric. I tried to move but felt a very familiar feeling of paws around me. I can’t even cry without her near me. I put my hand over her paw and her grip tightened. ”I’m sorry… I’m sorry… I let go of her paw and turned to see her. Her face was saddened and her cat ears were pressed against her head. ”Ever since I was a little girl I had loved the fairy tale stories my father told us. I wanted to meet a prince charming that would appear from nowhere and be his for the rest of my life. That’s why when I met you I had thought my fairy tales came true… I pressed all of my feelings against you, without your permission. And since i’m the daughter of the leader of the Grey Gardens that would make you the first candidate to being the next leader. I didn’t want you to go through those, I wanted to think that everything would be like in a fairy tale and we would live happily ever after… i’m sorry” I tried to reply but nothing came to mind. I couldn’t think of a single response except one. I turned my body and wrapped my own arms around her. I could feel her more prominently. Her small body seemed to fit perfectly next to mine, her soft features pressed against me. I could feel her nuzzle her face more into my chest and her tail began to coil around my legs. I closed my mind and hummed a hymn my mother used to sing to me when I was a kid. I couldn’t remember the words but I remembered the tune bright as day. All of the thoughts about everything that had occurred suddenly disappeared. All i could think about was the warmth of Sapphire and the feeling of maternal love my mother showed me when I was sad as a kid. It was pleasant. |
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| It seems unlikely that one would pick a random man who just happen to visit the place as a next heir. Even though man are supposed to be quite rare in this environment, you certainly wouldn't be a singe man Tony (or his clan) met in a long time considering their high standing and celebrity status, so they wouldn't be so desperate to make a first available person into the heir's trial. What if someone else walked into the Oasis first? And what if he succeeded in a trial? Anyway, celebrity's life tends to have moments that others wouldn't experience. It's a nice story, I like it. I hope you will keep up being unique |
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| It's cause Sapphire chose Chris, and Sapphire is Tony's daughter. If Sapphire and Chris got married that would make him the next male in Tony's Family |
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MoniStar said: ”ALL OF YOU SHUT UP!” The room went dead silent as my outburst rang in the room. ”ALL OF THIS NOISE NOISE NOISE! WHEN DID ANYONE THINK ABOUT WHAT I WANTED! I GOT TELEPORTED HERE AGAINST MY WILL! I’VE HAD TO PERFORM IN A CONCERT AGAINST MY WILL! I’M BEING FORCED TO TAKE THESE STUPID TRIALS AGAINST MY WILL! AND IT FEELS LIKE I’M BEING FORCED INTO A MARRIAGE AGAINST MY WILL WHEN I LITERALLY WAS BROKEN HEARTED NOT LONG BEFORE I GOT HERE! WHEN DID MY LIFE BECOME SOMETHING THAT WASN’T MINE!” **Cheers Christian on** |
| Oh, my. The young man stands up for himself at last. So, yeah... it seems that he has passed Tony's test. ;) |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| Careful with those rebounds... Just because she's a hot princess with (probably) rich parents doesn't mean--actually, what the hell? What the worst that could happen? Aside from being killed in the remaining trials...or by someone in the family if you upset their princess...or by the desert. Are there sand bees? Watch out for those too, just in case. And scorpions. |
emeraldtryst said: What the worst that could happen? Aside from being killed in the remaining trials...or by someone in the family if you upset their princess...or by the desert. Are there sand bees? Watch out for those too, just in case. And scorpions. Mirages, don't forget them mirages! |
emeraldtryst said: Are there sand bees? Only Zahra, and she seems to like Chris. And Sapphire's no princess (though she's spoiled enough); mom's just a priestess, and daddy's a mere captain (heh!). At best she's the equivalent of a marquess or viscountess. |
tygertygerJul 23, 2015 7:09 PM
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
MoniStar said: It's cause Sapphire chose Chris, and Sapphire is Tony's daughter. If Sapphire and Chris got married that would make him the next male in Tony's Family Tony have 7 daughters and all of them have a high chance to find a man they like (and few men they don't) due to their relatively high standing. At least, I personally feel it would work this way. In the end, you wouldn't be a only man in the family and thus not only heir. I can imagine one of the girls would run into the men from other stories, which would be interesting scenario. I do understand that father wants a best man for his daughter though and hence the test. |
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| Now this theory might be a spoiler, so read at your own risk: Malise said: Tony have 7 daughters and all of them have a high chance to find a man they like (and few men they don't) due to their relatively high standing. At least, I personally feel it would work this way. In the end, you wouldn't be a only man in the family and thus not only heir. I can imagine one of the girls would run into the men from other stories, which would be interesting scenario. I do understand that father wants a best man for his daughter though and hence the test. If I remember correctly he has 14 daughters: 7 Sphinxes and 7 Anubii. Also in a world where MSGs outnumber human men roughly 50 to 1, even the high standing girls are not guaranteed to find a man. Let alone one they really like for who they are, not just for being a man. So I can definitely see some envy rising among Sapphire's sisters should Chris decide to give her a chance. Unless a MSG is at or near the top of the social ladder she can't afford to be too picky. Or maybe if she's a breeder of humans. Not sure on the legality of human breeding, though. Edits: messed up BBcode + typos + rephrasing |
MetallumOperaturJul 24, 2015 4:18 PM
MetallumOperatur said: MSGs outnumber human men roughly 50 to 1, even the high standing girls are not guaranteed to find a man. It was 30 to 1 if I remember correctly. It is still a pretty low chance too though, however as you pointed out in the rule thread before actual population may be much higher than one mentioned in the lore, which includes also a much better female to male ratio. |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
| Well the 30 to 1 is the Mamono / human ratio. Since not all humans are male, the mamono/males ratio is even worse than 30 to 1. I assumed that roughly 60% of the humans are male, giving a ratio of 50 to 1. Now if roughly 75% of the humans are male, the ratio would be 40 to 1. As for the higher population numbers that doesn't necessarily mean a better mamono/human ratio, it could just as well turn out into the same or even a worse ratio. The only thing that changes for sure is the chance that a mamono has seen a human, since that depends in the human population density (more humans, island stays the same size). The chance a mmamono obtains a mate/husband mostly depends on the ratio mamono / men. Personally I like the current ratio of around 40-50 to 1. |
MetallumOperatur said: If I remember correctly he has 14 daughters: 7 Sphinxes and 7 Anubii. It's actually 12 daughters; six anubi and six sphinxes. Ten were born to the blessing from Charisse. The remaining two were born under the generalized blessing of Ahmose. Here's a scorecard so you can keep the names straight -- the anubi are named after weapons, the sphinxes after jewels: Katana/Amethyst (not in this story; my sequel story will explain why) Talwar/Topaz Falcata/Beryl Shotel/Jade Misericordia/Sapphire Balisong Ruby |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| It seems we got into that kind of conversation I didn't want, but let me finish my thought. In spoiler for those who doesn't want to read as it isn't a criticism or related to the story itself. I would like to say that I like the story and I hope it will keep a more unique path in the future. |
MaliseJul 25, 2015 2:33 PM
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