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Welcome to the Mortal Creation Thread! This is where you can make your character, who will go on to fight for a chance to be one of the next Greek Gods (or Goddesses) to rule over the Earth and Humanity. When making a character, be very descriptive, making sure to include the most important stuff. If you cannot do this, please explain why.

Character Creation in Starlight uses the Star Point System, which will be explained in the following spoiler below:

Star Points System


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Character Creation Sheet


List of Banned Powers! Any form of these will not be accepted!

Mind Altering Powers: Things like Hypnosis, Drugging, etc. Anything that would cause a characters personality to change, cannot be included in a power. Your characters power cannot force another role-player to change the way their character acts because of any sort of mind-altering.

Time powers: No form of these are accepted. Your character cannot affect time in any way.

Teleportation: No form of Teleportation is accepted. This includes your character moving so fast, no one can react. That is God modding.

Gun Powers: No form of Gun powers will be Accepted. This goes for normal guns as well.
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Name:Icarus of Crete
Age:17
Birthday:Unknown, he doesn't know AD time system comparison, but somewhere in greek mythological times
Species:Human
Gender:Male

Appearance Description: 5'7, green eyes, black hair, Greek, somewhat muscled due to training, wears normal clothes for modern day including slacks, a tee shirt, and tennis shoes.



Personality Description: Icarus wants to be a glorious fighter like the legendary Heracles he always admired. His personal goal is to one day touch the sun, wanting to be superior to nature and its rules just like the gods, and not needing to use mere technology to do so like his father had. Although he has not yet been informed of why he has been reborn, it is likely he will accept the cause to fight to become a god, if it seems like he might actually accomplish the goal. If the fighting does not seem to be very much of a glorious Labor, due to weak opponents, impossibly unbeatable enemies, or any other reason, he could change his mind and enjoy his freedom as a human who can fly, seeking some other kind of glory out in the world.

Primary Power: Wings of Icarus

After his revival, Icarus was given the power he always envied of the gods and sought:complete freedom from the chains of gravity without any outside assistance, being able to freely move in midair at any angle with no restrictions except momentum. Icarus is able to fly in two ways. If Icarus flies slowly, which will always be about the same speed as a slowly gliding bird if he moves in limited ways similar to a bird(unable to scale with Agility), he can maintain his flight for a very long amount of time, able to cross even small seas(this is mostly not measurable in posts, but would be an absurd amount). He can also do this in an antigravity way with no restrictions on movement direction, but this is much slower, being like a human's walking speed and also unable to scale with Agility to become faster. This form is mostly unused by Icarus in fights due to his personality:he would rather quickly and more honorably settle the fight than stall out his opponent.

Icarus' other possible flight method is quite fast, scaling with his Agility stat but also having real energy costs. At base it lasts about 8 Posts. With his current Extraordinary Agility, he can fly about twice as fast as an athletic human can run at base at normal levels of use. The energy cost doesn't increase with higher Agility due to it being used as a base. However, if he uses more energy, he can travel faster. This is not very efficient currently however, and can only increase up to 1.5x his base Agility stat at the cost of almost tripled energy consumption rate, lasting only 3 posts. Another limit on his power, is its inefficiency:Despite having much less friction, the speed of the flight is not high enough to allow that to greatly increase his speed like it would for a bird.

Icarus' power gives the visual effect of two wings of light whenever he uses it, although they are not tangible and do not interact with the environment in normal ways other than producing negligible heat. The wings glow brighter when more energy is consumed at once.

Being a power given to him by the sun god Helios, Wings of Icarus relies on sunlight to function optimally. Without sunlight exposure, Icarus' max aerial speed is reduced to only 60% capacity. However, sunlight is not the actual energy source, merely a condition:Icarus' Prana is what is being drained. More use of prana with possible future powers could lower his duration of being able to fly. Similarly, higher Prana in the future would increase the Base duration of his flight in both ways of flight. With Extraordinary Prana, it would be 16 Posts at base with no other magic used.

Furthermore, Icarus also has Stamina/Constitution limits on his flight. In the steady flight option, this would not be a factor, but with fast+agility scaling flight, he would still lose Stamina in addition to Prana, although much less than running would take. So, for example, if his Agility stat greatly increased, he could not bypass the natural consequence of using much more stamina than normal due to higher speed. To compensate for said weakness, he will need Constitution if his Agility increases enough in order to maintain high speed for longer periods of time.

Weapons of Choice:

Icarus has trained extensively in the use of a spear for combat, and will find upon waking a golden spear(which is not made of gold) in his room of 2m length with a sharp blade at the tip, meant to be wielded with two hands. The weapon design and shape would be something like this, for an idea of the blade's appearance:



Attributes:
Above Average Speed
Above Average Agility



Biography:

Icarus was born in Crete and raised by his father Daedalus and his nameless mother who wasn't important enough to be in the legend. He grew up to admire the legends of fighting heroes like the great Heracles, who had performed many impossible trials and eventually ascended to godhood, not wishing to be an engineer or architect as his father instructed, and continually tried to train himself up so he would qualify for the army, building up not only his physical strength but also his skill with the spear. He wanted to surpass human limits like the heroes of legend(which was recent history to him) and achieve greatness through glory, not genius. Eventually he and his father were captured and held prisoner. It was his arrogant dad's architectural genius which allowed him to build artificial wings for the two of them to escape with, but it was all for naught as he wanted to fly as high as he could despite the warnings to take a level path. As he started to plummet after his wings melted, Icarus realized he couldn't rely on artificial miracles to achieve what he really wanted.

Icarus has had his memories immediately after death and until his recent rebirth sealed by Helios, the god who picked him. He has not yet learned why. He also does not yet know of his newfound power and Agility beyond human standards. He will soon learn that his Wings of Icarus are a gift from Helios:a taste of the divine power he always envied and desired, given because Helios saw potential in him to be one of the new Greek Gods, if he fought well and soared as high as he sought with his ambition.

Additionally, the magic used to ressurect him also instinctively gave him much modern knowledge, allowing him to speak a tongue foreign to him(presumably English if that is the used language) without any effort. For example, he could use social media without effort if it were needed although such a situation is unlikely, as his actual attitudes and beliefs aren't changed by the many instinctive knowledges gained that would help him fit in the modern era.(Not being shocked by the sight of modern technology, etc)

Additional Information:Icarus currently does not know of his newfound ability. He also has not yet discovered that his spear has a latent solar ability(his future Secondary Power) that is as of yet undeveloped by him, relating to its origin as a weapon given to him by Helios the sun god.
CanaasJun 8, 2016 3:56 PM
Jun 1, 2016 7:23 PM
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Jun 1, 2016 10:17 PM
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    Name: Alkura Mswatti "Ace of Cloves"

    Age: 14

    Birthday: February 19th

    Species: Wolf/Elf Hybrid
    Gender: female

    Appearance Description:
    5ft, 110 lbs, small, red hair and wolf ears. Blood red eyes and white skin, smooth and unblemished as can be on her arms and legs, but her back and chest are covered with numerous scars. A black ace of cloves tattoo is on her right hand.




    Personality Description: Although Fun, airheaded, and clumsy, Alkura tends to stay away from people, only letting those she deems trustworthy or those that Asola takes an interest into her personal circle of friends. She is smart academic wise, able to do anything math wise or able to recite many facts off the top of her head. But when it comes to doing anything practical, such as cooking, cleaning, or even buying food, she is hopeless. If too many people attempt to talk to her or pay attention to her, she freezes up and gets shy. In combat though, she takes on a complete three sixty one personality though. She becomes absolutely blood thirsty and creepy as hell.

    Total Star Points: 20/20

    Weapons:
    One 1917 style Naval cutlass
    One 9 inch U.S. Army issue K-Bar combat knife
    Two extendable metal combat batons

    Attributes:

      -Extraordinary Dexterity
      -Prime Perception



    Biography:
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    Name: Lisa Lightshield

    Age: 17

    Birthday: April, 30th

    Species: Human

    Gender: Female

    Appearance Description: Lisa has blonde hair, blue eyes and fair skin. Just like a maiden. Although unlike a maiden, Lisa wears light armor like a soldier. ( Picture )



    Personality Description: Lisa is a stubborn person, never giving up or giving into despair, she always lifts her own spirits up. Durable just like her body, her cheerfulness and will won't falter.

    Total Star Points: 20/20

    Secondary Power: Chains of Judgement
    The user is capable of opening up a max of 3 portals into their arsenal, sending out chains from it. The chains have a max range of 10m, including the blades, and their trajectory can be manipulated by the user. As the chains themselves are not normal, they use the user's Magical Energy as it's Endurance. The chains have a max Speed equal to the user's Magical Energy + 3 ranks, and have blades at their ends. The chains are capable of binding someone, given the user is capable of holding that person down. The chains require the user's Strength, like normal chains, to push and pull, or forcibly moving anything that it binds. Or it can also make use of Prana, the user's ability to use magic, to do so hands-free, to push and pull, or forcibly move anything that it binds.

    Weapons:
    • Chains
    • Light Armor


    Attributes:
    • Extraordinary Magical Energy
    • Abnormal Endurance


    Biography: Lisa was born as a princess to a warring kingdom. As she was born a girl, she was supposed to be marrying a prince from another kingdom to create an alliance. But she had chosen a different path, and decided to join the Legions of the Kingdom. As a princess, this was frowned upon, but it had also given the soldiers a new light. A new something to fight for. To protect with their lives as the fair princess walked with them into battle. Although not on her first battle, the princess had one day suffered a shattering defeat. She got taken as a war trophy, as well as a war prisoner. As a female, it was obvious what would happen to her. And that had also lead to her death.

    Additional Information:
    • N/A
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Approved!

(and Conman too, accidentally deleted the first approval. Sorry ^^;
Signed:LS)
LightSpark090Jun 2, 2016 12:16 PM
I'm merely a deredere, tsundere, devidere, yandere, kudere and all dem other dere's :3
Jun 2, 2016 12:55 PM
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    Name: Trin Tlacelel

    Age: 15

    Birthday: September 5th

    Species: Human

    Gender: Female

    Appearance Description:


    Personality Description: Trin is an energic girl, very determined to do whatever she has in her mind and very passionate about her job as a "hero". She is very friendly and has a bubbly personality, seemingly innocent and oblivious at time, but she is not an idiot, so she isnt that easy to fool in more important issues. However, she is indeed too trusting for her good, so if someone were to get her trust she would believe in that person even if in the end they betrayed her.
    Even if she's better at fighting than at diplomacy, she does believe that diplomacy is more effective than fighting. Trin is a big dreamer and a hopeless romantic, childish, very helpful and loyal, a good girl to have around and count on

    Total Star Points: 20/20

    Primary Power: N/A

    Secondary Power: Second Chance
    Trin is able to recover passively from damage received during combat through her glorious power of will! There are certain values of HP she can receive back HP, them being the following depending of what happened between her last turn and the present one
    -received no aditional damage: +10%HP
    -received damage: +5%HP
    -healed/out of combat: +0%HP (overwrites receiving damage)

    Weapons: The Blade of Destiny, a magical silver sword created by the world's greatest sages of Earth, Heaven and Hell to aid the hero in her quest to saving the world... now produced in China under the name of "steel sword", how boring.

    Attributes:

      -Extraordinary Dexterity
      -Abnormal Defense


    Biography:

    Additional Information: Anime is love, anime is life. Self-proclaimed "savior of the universe".
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Name: Aria Snow( nickname Red snow demon)

Age: 16

Birthday: May 19

Species: soul contractor

Gender:female

Appearance Description: arias eyes are the piercing color of a blood ruby the reason for this is because of the contract she had made. Aria is a small girl not very tall her hair is the color of pure snow.



Personality Description: Aria is cold not very concerned with others since she isnt interested in others much. Aria listens to music alot she does talk but if she isn't interested she will be st aright forward with you. She is a great companion to work with in parties or groups, Aria has had extensive military hand to hand combat training due to her family history of military services on her father's side. This was taught to her from a very young age, almost before she could walk, Aria isn't afraid of much except losing her friends or family.

Total Star Points:20/20

Primary Power: Sound reverberation-This ability was bestowed upon Aria when she had given up her soul to the god of vibrantilinty, this owe allows Aria to track her foes position through vibrations by up to 3 kilometers (2miles) tracking is the main use of this ability, however it has a passive abilities. Aria is able to create musical notes in the air for entertainment
Secondary Power: NA

Weapons: stilleto dagger, hand to hand combat, harpoon sythe
Harpoon sythe-this weapon has the tip of a harpoon and on the opposite end the blade of a sythe

Attributes:


-Above average stamina
-Above average agility




Biography: Aria was a normal high school girl, till the day she stumbled upon a very rare book. This book wasn't ordinary in the slightest, Aria took the book from the store she was in. As Aria got home, she realized her father wasn't home yet nor anyone else. This was good for Aria since she had been argueing with her family for a month. Aria ran up to her room and set the book on her bed, however Aria didn't have a clue as what she had in her possession, not long after setting the strange book down her phone began to ring, it was Arias father she declined the calls several times. Finally she was annoyed with the constant ringing of her phone so she answered the phone with anger, Aria spoke with a fierce anger and harsh words. Afterwards Aria heard complete silence then a loud crashing sound. Aria was worried as she yelled trying to get an answer from the other end of the call. Aria already knew in the back of her mind what had happened, Aria cried out in sorrow.

That night the book she had carried into the house began to glow a dark red is color, as a voice spoke softly in a low whisper. I am the skyrice god of vibrantilinty, child why do you suffer isn't this what you wished for deeply. Now your free from your restraints are you not? Aria looked around the room for this mysterious voice, as she had looked around she saw the book was glowing. Aria spoke out as she was full of regret, sorrow and pain, Aria said she would do anything to redo what had been said and what had happened. The book felt the girls sincerity and spoke again, is that so girl come to me and tell me your name and what it is you want, however girl head these words for every action there is an even greater price. Aria spoke her name and how she wished her father was still alive, the goddess spoke to Aria as she appeared from the book as it opened up by itself. For this price girl it will require your soul, if this is truely what you desire it shall be done.

Aria immediately agree to the terms but she didn't understand what this had meant at the time. The goddess looked at Aria and smiled, from this day forward girl your soul will be bound to me an the power of vibrations will be yours as we are now one and the same. However you will only have you will only be able to use certain attributes of this power, you can not be killed as I will protect you from here on out you will do my will. Also your no longer alive so your family has lost their only child for the return of your father, that is the price for another's life.

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    Name:Avnore

    Age: 20

    Birthday: September 2nd

    Species: Human

    Gender: Male

    Appearance Description:

    • 5'7 ft
    • 167 lb
    • All-seeing eyes on both eyes
    • Abnormal clothing style
    • Blonde hair
    • Pale skin color





    Personality Description:

    • When he isn't taking anything seriously, he acts goofy, chill and very eccentric
    • When he's takes things seriously, he refrains from acting goofy, chill and eccentric
    • He is clever and intelligent
    • He is sadistic when he plays a prank on someone, he is most sadistic when it is someone he hates a lot.
    • Merciful, even when he is sadistic

    Total Star Points: (20/20)

    Primary Power:All-Seeing Eyes
    Avnore has special eyes that shine light blue and even when his eyes are closed, he can still see in the vision of humans.
    One Eye: He can see farther and he can see in the dark. He can also see through smoke. His eyes light up though so it will be hard if he is doing a stealth mission.
    Both Eyes: He gains X-ray vision and can see as far as binoculars at their full potential. He can also see even his opponent when he is invisible, going at super fast speeds and predict his opponent's next move. The only catch is that he can't use both his eyes at the same time for very long. If he keeps it open for a certain amount of time, he will start getting headaches and will get dizzy from it. (Duration = 3 posts, Cooldown = 5 posts)


    Secondary Power:Re:Direction Knife
    A knife with a charge up meter. When every time Avnore blocks or parries a strike, depending on the power of the strike, the meter will go up from 1-10 depending on how strong it was. He can redirect the power back at the opponent by trying to strike at his opponent. If he misses or his knife gets parried, the force will be lost and he would have to wait a little while before the knife can absorb power from strikes again. (Cooldown = 2 posts)

    Weapons:Re:Direction Knife
    A knife with a charge up meter. When every time Avnore blocks or parries a strike, depending on the power of the strike, the meter will go up from 1-10 depending on how strong it was. He can redirect the power back at the opponent by trying to strike at his opponent. If he misses or his knife gets parried, the force will be lost and he would have to wait a little while before the knife can absorb power from strikes again. (Cooldown = 2 posts)
    Kronen
    A bladed tonfa forged by a blacksmith when Aethraden was peaceful. Avnore found a pair of these tonfas during a scouting mission. It seems to be very durable as it hasn't broken after 10-25 battles with monsters. Avnore usually uses Kronen to hide the power of his knife.



    Attributes:None

    Biography: Avnore found himself in the woods alone with no memory of his past life. Why? Because he was actually made into the world as a 20 year old man with powerful eyes during Earth's breakdown. He turned out to be an intelligent, clever, but also goofy man. He had a knack for detective work and he wanted to use his power to find out what the mysteries of the world were. He lived in Aethraden, where he met many others. He also learned how to master his All-Seeing Eyes in the forest from defeating many of the monsters in Aethraden. Though he was a great and powerful detective, he ended up dying from sacrificing his life for his friends. He ended up fighting a horde of monsters left and right. Avnore kept fighting until he was soon overwhelmed. He died with a smile on his face since he was happy to know his friends didn't die. He left the world with the memories of his friends and Aethraden.

    Additional Information:
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Jun 2, 2016 5:48 PM

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In the Primary Power, please remove that paralysis.
For your weapon, that seems more like a power than a weapon that does nothing. Either make it just a normal Knife or make it your secondary.
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Alright, edited and added a new weapon to Avnore.


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@Titanania:Please remove the enhancement pills or make them part of a power.

The primary is balanced enough, but it seems odd for there to be a 'god of vibrantillity'. This is a greek mythology based rp.

@LightSpark: Although it's a WIP I'll just comment on what you have so far in case the power is finished. That secondary seems balanced enough, but you should say it regenerates her physically since you seem to be going for that.

"-healed/out of combat: +0%HP (overwrites receiving damage)"This is supposed to mean she is restored to full health out of combat, right? Please don't write it as +0%. Just say over time(probably a few minutes, maybe 10 or 20) she is healed to full outside of combat, which will take longer with higher constitution.

@Earnest:I'm trying to figure something out about your primary for your character. It looks balanced, but I'm wondering if he automatically has this power on if he has his eyes open. It says he can still see in the vision of humans. I'm assuming that means he can switch this power on and off?

I'm fine with the secondary he has.
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I guess I can work the speed into the power but as for the other two that won't work also I have no more SP I used 12 on my primary power then the other 8 on my attribute, unless the attribute has seperated SP that I don't know about I have no more SP to use
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@Titanania:I know you have more SP, I'm just saying it won't work out unless you have it in a power. Whether that meant removing attributes, getting the power with the pills later, or something else.
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Editted
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@Titanania:The powers and weapons look fine now to me, but I still wonder about the 'god of vibrantility' being allowed as canon. The final decision on that I'll leave up to SoulXtreme since he's the creator and would know best what he intended.
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That God is just a made up one lol it just goes with my characters power that's it she gave up her soul to that God and nothing more Aria is a soul contractor. I explained this yesterday didn't I that the soul contractors just do the bidding of the god they are bound to, till they complete their objectives. The gods can't do anything except watch so what worries you about it?
Jun 3, 2016 7:33 PM

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To put into better terms and easier to understand it's an npt thays all. It's kind of like an alter ego or a seperated mind a conscious if you prefer.
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@Titanania:I didn't have a problem with the god being a character and doing anything. My problem was with a 'God of vibrantility' even existing in a club which is supposed to have greek gods. They wouldn't fit in the greek god pantheon and as a result would be odd to exist.
Jun 3, 2016 7:42 PM

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it's just a background story thats it it doesn't have to fit at all my charcter is an OC not a copy of some Greek god story, my bio doesnt have to match. But my bio does consist of 2 things that the club does require however. 1. How the power was aquire and 2. How my character had died. Those are the requirements to the character bio that soul made clear.
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@Titanania:It might be possible for an OC to have a different background. I didn't mean that everyone has to explicitly be made for this club. But it seems like it would make sense for it to not greatly contradict it. The god you wanted to be in their background just seems really odd to exist to me personally, because of the theme of the club. Although you could argue I suppose that 'other gods' besides the greek god pantheon could exist, it seems weird to me still.

Aside from not fitting, 'God of Vibranility' just sounds kind of stupid overall. If they were a god that controlled all atomic/molecular vibration as that seems to imply, it would make them absurdly more powerful than even the greek gods of this club. That generally doesn't seem like it would fit here. I would consider it a general rule of thumb, that bios need to make some sense, and having a god who would probably be vastly more powerful than a greek god based on those powers, seems like it wouldn't make sense.

But overall it is up to SoulXtreme to decide it.
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I agree with your concept to control atomic/molecular vibrations, thays why I nerf ed the ability to its main use to tracking with weak passive abilities and no offensive capabilities. In a different rp grouo I used a sound based ability and made it offensive, it was quickly condemned to OP. And I do believe soul read my bio already but never said anything about it.

@SoulXtreme

Whats your take on this does my bio really violate any rules or contridict anything besides not being a Greek mythology bio as we are argueing whether it matters or not, because I would really like to rp sometime soon.
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@Titanania This RP is characters pulled from different dimensions. So, that makes it where no bio can contradict the RP.

In this case, I allow it.
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The power stays on the entire time, it is just that, when he closes his eyes, the power is hindered to the point where he sees like us. Though when he opens either of his eyes, it enhances his vision and he sees far more things than what a nromal human would.


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@EarnestMovie:

If that's the case, with your character's ability being impossible to turn off when both eyes are open, it means that your character can't have both of his eyes open for too long without suffering headaches. So he'd have to keep one eye closed all of the times to interact normally. If that's what you were going for all right, but if not I felt like you should be informed.
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Yeah, that was the idea for Avnore's power. Like Leo who can't turn off his power, Avnore suffers the same consequences of this power. So he'd have to keep his eyes closed if he wants to see what others see. One eye is he wants part of the power and both for it's full power.


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@Earnest:Wait, you make it seem like he would be able to see like a human through his eyelids while his eyes were closed(meaning he can never really have his vision restricted and sleep right) Is that what you meant? But either way I would be fine with your character's abilities if you do want him to have that problem or if you didn't. They seem pretty balanced to me.
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He can always use those things that cover your eyes so I guess that answers the sleeping question.


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@EarnestMovie:That would make sense, I hadn't thought of it.I approve of your character now.
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    Name: Keel Lorenz

    Age: 28

    Birthday: September, 11

    Species: Human

    Gender: Male

    Appearance Description: Short black hair, dark-grey eyes, very slight bristle, pointy jawline. Keel has an average height of an adult white male, standing at 183cm, weight with all of the augmentations - 90kg. He usually wears dark strict clothing, but his fashion sense is close to nonexistent, so you won't see his face on the ladies top wanted list. Used to wear glasses, but after being enhanced he was no longer in need of them.



    Personality Description: Keel's most important trait is his devotion to the cause and his determination, which can also be seen as blind stubbornness. If he sets a goal before him, he will try to achieve it no matter what, often taking huge risks and setting morals aside if needed. With that, he also is a big gambler willing to take a chance even if it's very dangerous and the price is right. He is a megalomaniac, believing that his worldview is the one and only that matters and that he is the one who should lead humanity forward, in this case by becoming a literal god himself. Outside of that, personally he is somewhat unstable, sometimes seeing people as his dearest friends and comrades, but at a flick of an event, he might start to see them as traitors or enemies, holding a huge grudge and dreaming of revenge. He believes he is a true altruist, working only for the better of humanity, but in reality he's just a self-centered insecure egoist wishing for power and recognition.

    Total Star Points: 20/20

    Primary Power: Supernatural Augmentations

    Prior to be sent to the Olympus, Keel knew what he was going to go through there and prepared himself for battle. SEHER has reverse-engineered ancient relics found in the ruins of Atlantis and crossed it with their own technology, creating powerful magical augmentations, which utilized both science and the arcane. Carefully crafted, it used various artifacts with different properties and implanted into Keel's organism, replacing some of his natural organs like liver, stomach, kidneys, entirety of the digestive track and partially the neural system. Just like normal body would, his augmented body is utilizing food as a source of energy, but it is much more efficient at it, processing the entire mass, making Keel waste-free and distributing energy much more efficiently, so Keel would only get hungry only if he used too much of his powers. As for powers, there are multiple:

    1. Ethereal Shield - Keel can create a technoarcane force-field that will protect him from attacks from a certain direction. It doesn't protect his entire body, so Keel can deploy the shield only in one direction at a time. It can protect from all sorts of attacks - ranged, melee, physical or magical. It works by converting the damage that would be caused to his HP by an attack to drain of his Energy points, multiplied by x1.5. An additional property of this shield is if Keel would need to, he could destroy it, making an explosion with high kinetic force, knocking back opponents in 1 meter to point blank range from him, only from the direction that his shield was deployed. It doesn't deal any serious damage, but will knock back an opponent by at least a couple of meters. An explosion would cost 20% energy.

    2. Solar Beam - a powerful ranged attack in the form of a beam of controlled plasma. It shoots out of Keel's eyes at an object or opponent he's looking at, travelling at Supreme (x4) speed and delivering a hit equal to Supreme (x4) strength. It uses 35% energy and has to be charged for one turn during which Keel can't use his weapons or deploy his shield, but he can still move around. After a shot it blinds Keel for one turn, making it hard to make things out (you can say it's like a x0.5 debuff to perception), also it has a 5-turn cooldown before he can use it again.

    3. Divine Leap - Keel can jump high distances in a single bound, but at a cost and not so often. He can leap 20 meters forward and 7 meters upward, at a cost of 20% energy. He has to charge up the leap by remaining stationary for one post and after the leap it has a 5-post long cooldown.

    Weapons:
    A single-edged power sword. Doesn't get damaged through use and only needs to be recharged once in a while in Keel's room.


    Attributes:

      -Abnormal Energy (Prana/Magical Energy replacement)
      -Abnormal Endurance

    Biography:

    Keel was born into a family of well-renowned scientists, his father being a Nobel Prize winner in physics and biology and his mother being a worldwide-known archaeologist. They were very, very rich and influential, as his father owned the biggest biotechnological corporation in the world, Lorenz Industries. As a biotechnologist, his father wanted his son to be perfect, so through genomic sequention he managed to select himself a perfect heir with immense intellectual capability. Keel developed really fast and with science-directed upbringing, his interests were only reading encyclopedias and learning more about all sort of sciences from the earliest age.

    As he grew up, he left the university he was studying at because it couldn't provide any more useful knowledge to him, so instead he decided to start researching by himself at the age of 20. Using his parents' immense amounts of money, he traveled throughout the world, working with various scientists on different subjects, earning a name for himself in the scientific circles, as a prodigy without a degree. Scientific world acknowledged him as very talented and resourceful, but the lack of degree and his father's shadow didn't let other scientists take him seriously. Eventually Keel found his muse in his mother's craft - archaeology. He and his team worked in the Mediterranean, excavating ancient ruins of the long-gone civilizations. He was notorious to find many ancient underground complexes which nobody else has ever found, shedding much more light on European history. But in most of these complexes he and his team found strange artifacts that with more research showed to have unusual properties, which resembled some sort of arcane magic, as it was impossible to explain it otherwise. More and more of his time went into the research of these artifacts, but he never let the information about them leave his R&D team.

    With his father's passing, he inherited his company and his riches, making research much more easier with such great amount of resources. He reshaped the company from a biotechnological R&D into his own private secret network of laboratories, researching ancient relics with supernatural properties. At the age of 24, Keel got a trace to the mythical city of Atlantis with the help of uncovered artifacts. Sending out an expedition, after a year of searching, he finally found the underwater city, buried beneath the sea floor of the Atlantic Ocean. The amount of weird artifacts, both of magical and scientific nature he found there was absolutely immense. Apparently, the whole state of Atlantis was based on these artifacts. From there his team found out the truth about the Divine - there indeed were true gods. More specifically, the gods from ancient Greek mythology. They really existed.

    Keel relocated all of his research labs into Atlantis, personally hand-picked the new staff and reformed his organisation as SEHER, with their only goal to research the gods and possibly find a way of interaction with them. But first of all, to keep their activities secret, scientists of SEHER created a cloaking device that hid their activity in Atlantis using their arcane technologies. To the Gods, Atlantis would seem stale and void of any activity, just like it was for thousands of years. But in reality, alive and bursting with activity once again, Atlantis became the most technologically advanced place on the planet. To them, this place was just normal sea floor, nothing else. Connections of SEHER went as far as major world powers, making their resources nearly endless.

    Their biggest breakthrough was the Eye - a device able to monitor Olympus and supervise the gods themselves without them knowing. Humanity finally found a way of outsmarting their creators with the artifacts they carelessly left around the globe and successfully forgot about them. The revelation shocked Keel, as the gods were indeed as they were portrayed in ancient myths, but the most intriguing part was that they planned to leave this world for the mortals and create the new generation of gods by hand-picking the most "worthy" of humans. It was a chance Keel couldn't let slide. Immediately from this point on the only objective of SEHER was to send him to Olympus and make sure he will become one of the new gods. The trials were to be made by combat, so SEHER made the best possible soldier out of Keel that they could. By combining technology and magical artifacts, they infused his body with powerful augmentations and enchantments, making sure he is going to have a chance at the fight.

    SEHER eventually managed to find a way of sending Keel to Olympus by abusing inefficient Olympian bureaucratic system. A god was to chose a champion, with or without other god's consent, they might as well not even reveal whom have they chosen. Some of them didn't even care much, so with that flaw SEHER modified the Eye to not only be able to see, but also affect what was happening, by an extent. They've traced one of the champions, who should've been collected from the past - a heroic Soviet soldier who was killed in the WWII should've become a champion chosen by Dionysios when he was really, really drunk. Next morning he only remembered that he should've summoned someone, but didn't really remember whom... a very convenient situation for Keel. So, with the Eye, SEHER managed to swap the champion of the gods with one of their own. Prepared to leave the Earth for good and get a shot of becoming a literal God, Keel stepped into the Eye, taking a huge risk as it was not sure if such a deceit could even work on the Gods... but it was worth a try. So Keel was pulverized in an instant to reappear in the mansion "on top" of Olympus. Hopefully humanity will be able to outwit the Gods.
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@Kris_Rebel:

Is Energy a replacement for Prana? If it is, you should make clear that he can't also get Prana. Please explain if energy points means % energy. Aka ten EP equals 10% energy just like 10% prana.

The Solar Beam seems fine to me. Divine Leap makes me think a bit, as even with the stationary post, it's a really big jump height and distance. But due to the chargeup needed it might be alright.

The powersword is fine.

Since Crow was fine with the organization you described existing, I'll allow it, but many parts of the bio still make me think twice. For instance stating that your base is utterly undetectable even to the gods, when they would obviously know the city suddenly dissapeared. I'd be more ok with a hidden underwater base somewhere near Atlantis secretly constructed by SEHER that has a strong cloaking field, that's strong enough that without observing the exact location of it with intense scans the gods would have no way to find it.

The Eye also bothers me a little bit, since I don't get how they'd change the list. And this would imply that the god summoning him instead of the soviet person would somehow not realize he wasn't said person. It would probably be better if he used some techno-arcane method to teleport into a room on the 1st floor, using the eye to observe the exact kind of calibration needed to teleport or whatever without getting vaporized by the automatic bounded field that would prevent things like this, along with using a lot of energy from the base, maybe siphoning some from atlantis too to make it. And then the Bureacracy effect could still take place with gods assuming some other god summoned him to the room.
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Fixed the bio and the power.
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@Kris_Rebel:That explanation with Atlantis and the infiltration using Bacchus' drunkenness and the teleport swap makes more sense to me. If SoulXtreme confirms he is alright with bio things still I will approve your character.
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@Titanania I revoke Aria's approval.

Remove that last bit of her primary power that says she moves 2x faster.
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@Titanania Re-approved.
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@Kris:Hmm...You should say how fast the Solar Beam is. I think maybe it should cost 5 or 10% more if it's 4x speed. An attack like that would be very effective, since it'd be able to pierce people and deal major damage, including causing bleeding. The blind and chargeup helps with not making it cost more though.

Other than that everything seems fine since SoulXtreme approves the bio.
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Pointed out the speed and raised the cost by 5%. Is it fine now, or should I raise the cost further?
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Approved! 1 week for you to write the bio as I know you are working on it
I'm merely a deredere, tsundere, devidere, yandere, kudere and all dem other dere's :3
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Name: Sakari 'Fox' Unmei
Age: 30
Birthday: 02-26
Species: Animal People, Fox
Gender: female

Appearance Description:



Personality Description: In her normal ways, she's casual and always up for a joke
doesn't really care about anything and is incredibly reckless and adventurous. running into the enemy doesnt mean much to her if she can have a drink with them, and go on her way the moment after. on a mission however, she's serious, yet doesnt seem to be caring too much, about what is a mystery though



Total Star Points USED: 20/20

Primary Power: (Reminder: Costs 12 SP)
Bracers
Power Explanation: She can use her bracers to fight, powered by explosive rounds


Secondary Power: (Reminder: Costs 8 SP. Please know that your secondary can't be as strong or stronger than your Primary. This will have to be a weaker power in case you choose not to make a Primary.)

Fluff

Her Fluff ability has 2 points. first of all, she loves being petted... her ears, her hair, her tail, her belly, she loves it......she won't just admit that though, as she's embarrassed about it and wants to hold her tough side up.. The other side is that she can transform into a fox. Its bigger than a regular one, big enough for 2 people to mount. Although she cant really attack except for with claws and teeth, she is more a mount for others to be used. She has high speed in this state, but hardly any damage, as such its only used to travel distances. It can also be used as a fluffy and warm pillow/bed by others. if you can get her that far.....


Weapons: Explosive Bracers, looks like normal bracers when in normal mode, but become gauntlets when activated for use. Uses other general explosives

Attributes:

    -Abnormal *enter attribute here (costs 4 SP)*
    -Extraordinary *enter attribute here (costs 8 SP)*
    -Prime *enter attribute here (costs 12 SP)*



Biography: However much you need to tell us about your character's past. You can do this in paragraphs or bullet points. Must also include how they died. (It has to be more than 100 words.)


Additional Information:
-Is great at brawling
-Explosives expert

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@Kris_Rebel:I think combined with the 5 Post cooldown on that your power should be fine. Even if he used Solar Beam early on, he'd basically have only one chance to use it due to the cooldown in a normal fight that didn't drag out, so it seems like it'd be all about trying to fight a bit and use it once he's sure he can hit in a lethal way. Missing would be pretty bad for him most likely due to the blind. It's mostly his Ethereal Shield he'd get the best use out of, but I see it as fine since it still takes energy when hit. Since Crow approved the Bio I'll approve your character now. Your character's Room should be up within ten minutes or so.
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@RazorDestiny: How damaging would these explosive bracers be? As in RWBY every character has a defensive aura preventing piercing damage. Would they just deal knockback or shrapnel people as well? Is there an ammo limit on the explosions? How are they created:by her own Prana/Chi/Magical Energy, or through the bracer's technology alone, or both?

In weapons explain what you mean by uses other general explosives. With the secondary, how high is the speed? Is it a multiplier off her base speed? By hardly any damage explain what you mean, do the claws not cut much then or are they just dull? If not I have a hard time understanding a low damage amount.
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    Name: Robin Hood II (True/Original name: Anwen of Locksley)

    Age: 26

    Birthday: 1st May

    Species: Human

    Gender: Female

    Appearance Description:
    Eye color: Green
    skin color: Slightly tan
    clothing style: Wears medieval clothes, but usually wears a hood and a robe too.
    hair: brown, short
    height: 175 cm
    weight: 65 Kg

    Personality Description: Loving, cautious, calm but rather shy, Robin is a nature lover and loves the forest. She is often sympathetic to the poor like her father before her, but she does not hold contempt for the rich as long as they've earned it.

    Total Star Points: 20

    Primary Power:

    Daughter of Robin Hood

    as the daughter of Robin Hood, she inherited traits from her father

    • Emerald Eyes: Enhanced sight, making her able to see clearly from 350m away if she focused, making her able to recognize someone's face at that range and gives her limited night vision.
      She can activate this ability at any time. It drains mana when she uses it, but she can otherwise use it freely. Her eyes become shinier but not at all luminescent.
    • Bow of the Hood: Legendary bow of Robin hood, able to shoot an arrow over a maximum effective distance of 500m (a normal Welsh Longbow's range is about 300m-370m). It can be destroyed but it will respawn after 5 posts. It also does not behave solely like a longbow, for example it can shoot arrows in a linear fashion like crossbows easily, though not at the same power.
    • Quiver of the Hood: Holds 200 arrows, slowly regenerates 5 arrows per post of not using arrows. Like the legendary bow, It can be destroyed but it will respawn after 5 posts. The arrow tips are armor piercing (as in, they could easily pierce light armor such as leather padded armor, though may struggle with plate armor at long ranges of course), and are made with strong iron.
    • Shadow Hood: Slightly changes color based on its surroundings, ideal for moving in the shadows or camouflage.


    All of these items can be stored inside special tattoos on her arm, back and neck.

    Secondary Power: N/A

    Weapons: Bow and Quiver of the hood

    Attributes:

      Abnormal Speed
      Abnormal Agility


    Biography:

    Born near the dark woods of Nottingham Forest, Robin Hood II was originally named by his father, Robin of Locksley, Anwen of Locksley. At the time she was born, her father had succeeded in becoming the King's royal guard. Thus, she grew up knowing a bit of chivalry and learning the art of Archery since childhood. The knights near her would teach her what her father lacked; nobility and respect in formal situations, battle tactics, as well as close quarters self defence. In turn, her father often took her to the woods where he would teach her his philosophy and respecting nature, as well as survival tactics. In the end, she was not as talented as her father in some aspects such as absolute accuracy and trick shots, but was superior in the use of arrows in tactics and could match him in power. All in all, she lived a nice, warrior's life.

    One day, she was hunting in the forest when she heard commotion from the town. She arrived there to see that, after the king's death, rebels had risen in the town, and they were after Robin Hood. Her father hastened and took her along with what was left of his merry men and a few loyal knights. The vengeful elite followed them with an army. He finally found a safe place and tried to hide Anwen there, but she refused and requested to fight alongside him. They would argue, but in the end, Robin would allow it if she supported from a range of 100m. In the end, the last stand was fierce, the elites had numbers but Robin's group had experience and skill. The knights would hold back the melee tide long enough for the merry men and Robin hood to pick them off by ambush or at range. She would also pick off any strays attacking her father. In the end though, the numbers were a bit overwhelming, but they held on. Robin and his merry men were not young anymore however, and eventually, the tide turned. They were being beat. In the end, it was left to a few enemy knights and Robin himself. She would be reassured. With her support and her father's skill, it would not be much trouble. She saw a knight nearing her father from the back and instinctively shot him and- she missed. Shocked, she could only look in despair as her father was stabbed from the back through his heart. At that moment, she felt his emerald eyes pass onto her, and cried, as it confirmed his death. This also enraged her however, and she used the emerald eyes to accurately snipe every one of the knights through the heart, before going back and holding her father's body, promising to continue his legacy, and thus became Robin Hood II.

    With the elites back in control, she restarted her father's quest and stole from the rich to give to the poor, but her love for nature meant that she would also protect its bounty from being abused much more often than his father ever did. She still felt guilt, vengefulness and regret, but she kept her word for honoring her father.

    One day, as she was scouting the forest, she was shot by bandits as she bathed in the river and quickly bled out. She defeated the bandits and managed to pull herself together, but clearly dying, she suddenly found-or rather was found-by a strange glowing light which spoke, and said "I have come to choose people to fight for the right to the power of the gods. Win the battle and you will become a god. I have scoured time and space to find the greatest heroes and history, and am here to find the great Robin Hood."

    She was taken a back a bit. The power emanating from the light assured her that it was the truth, but she hesitated. However, realizing the potential of this-that, as a goddess, she could stop the cycle of bloodshed which plagued even her father before her, she looks up at the light and says

    "I am Robin Hood."

    Additional Information:
    The daughter of the legendary Robin Hood, she is equipped with basic survival supplies such as a flash of water, knives, darts and basic medical supplies most of the time.

    She also has a mastery over the art of Archery, taught by her father himself. She can do trick shots like shooting while moving and even in midair, to varying effectiveness and has a shooting rate of max. 20 shots/minute (3 shots per post assuming a post is 5-10 seconds). Not as strong or accurate as her father, but anything within 25m would be easily hit in the bullseye. At full strength she could conceivably shoot an arrow more powerful than an elite English longbowman. Of course, all of this is only her maximum potential when static and hitting a static object. She has to focus on rate of fire, strength, or accuracy as she shoots and sacrifices the other two if she does it to her full potential, and even then she needs ideally a static target, a good vantage point, good range and needs to be static herself, making her feats in real life battle not as absurd at all.

    Knows self defence but is not an amazing master of it or anything.

    Other than this she has good tactical ability, a bit of leadership and charisma, is resourceful, and has good survival instincts.

    Cares for nature a lot. Really huge environmentalist. Also a lesbian.
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@Haruka:

The indestructible bits of your weapons are something I'm not sure about, since for now I'm assuming weapons can break but are always repaired. If you're worried about it getting destroyed beyond credible repairs, just make it so it always returns eventually. Like, even if it was stolen or turned to dust, after a certain amount of time she'd get her quiver/bow back.

That accuracy feat seems too good. I also wonder a little bit if it's too similar to perception. Infinite ammo essentially quiver seems alright but the indestructible bit bothers me. Camoflauge should be fine.

With the weakpoints how exactly would that be used?
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@Canaas: nerfed it a bit.

Weakpoints would basically be her being able to see which parts of the enemy are vulnerable. I guess it would be unnecessary given her sight though. I was thinking something like she could see where the enemy was wounded, externally and/or internally and aim at it.
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@Haruka:With the range of sight you should just explain what exactly that means in combat. And how detailed the sight is at max range, like can she read one of those signs for visual acuity with smaller and smaller font? It also seems a little similar to Avnore's power so if Earnest objects I might have to ask you to change it.
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@Haruka:Powers of your chara seem mostly ok now, but if EarnestMovie sees the eye powers as being too similar you will probably have to change that.
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@Canaas: Ok. I might buff her a bit in the future though so you should look at her again later.
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@Haruka:
" She can do trick shots like shooting up to 3 Arrows at once "This seems a bit extreme to me, what kind of accuracy would she have with this? I feel like this shouldn't be possible since depending on how it works, it would possibly be basically undodgable.

"At full strength she could conceivably shoot an arrow near to the power of a crossbow bolt."I'm pretty sure crossbows shoot with much more power than longbows or normal bows, so I'd have to say no here.

" The arrow tips are armor piercing, and are made with meteoric iron from Norse mythology, stronger than most other metals."Seems like it might be too strong, when combined with the visual powers.

"Emerald Eyes: Enhanced sight, making her able to see clearly from 350m away if she focused, making her able to recognize someone's face at that range and gives her limited night vision.
She can activate this ability at any time. It drains mana when she uses it, but she can otherwise use it freely. Her eyes become shinier but not at all luminescent."In general how long would this last with normal chi/prana levels when constantly active?
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@Canaas: just think of it as a triple damage arrow, it is less accurate and has less power but does more damage if every one hits obviously.

that's why I said near, I was just trying to emphasize that she's stronger than normal elite archers.

that's just to make sure nobody goes like, "oh it's just an arrow it bounces off of my shoulder". In reality meteoric iron isn't that strong compared to stuff like stainless steel, so I think it's actually not to its full potential.

I would guess if she would not strain it, she could go a long time, maybe up to 15-20 posts nonstop, but if she strains it continuously her mana would be depleted by less than 10 posts. Keep in mind her arrow regeneration is passive and also requires mana
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