| This is where my story is going to be posted and hopefully it will be really good and everyone will love it. The first chapter will be up in a second so thanks for reading in advance. :) |
| Here is my first chapter enjoy! Also here is a key to help you read it Blue text is the main character speaking Green is him thinking/speaking in his head red is the other character he meets in this chapter I may change up the colours later on so this may just be for this chapter BEEP,BEEP!! The sound of cars horn trying to tell me to get out of the way manages to wake me back up as I swerve back onto the correct side of the lane. "Shit!, that was close" Working late again is really starting to take effect on me, I can barely keep my eyes open and I've still got a thirty minute drive. Turning into a national speed limit zone I start to floor it, I mean there are no other cars on the road so what’s the problem right. The rain is pouring down, looks like it’s going to be here a while. my window wipers are at full speed and still I can barely see but still I decided getting home was worth the risk of speeding, A decision I will soon come to regret. As I heard around the next corner I notice a cat in the road, quickly I turn my steering wheel to the left hoping to dodge him however that's when the tires start to loose grip and the screech of rubber slipping on the tarmac starts. the car suddenly rolls over as I begin to fear for my life. Five rolls later and the car has finally stopped, it feels like a tree or something solid has halted it and I slowly begin to lose consciousness after taking a nasty bump on the head. ***Hours later*** "ughhh, my head is killing" Waking up my hand immediately goes to my head checking for blood or any injuries. "hmmmm, looks like I'm okay..... I have always been a lucky one" I think to myself as a smile comes across my face. A cool breeze happens to blow across my body making me shiver. "God its cold out here I wish I was inside" "Wait where is my car and why am I not in it?" Looking around I see trees..... lots and lots of trees, in fact I would go so far as to describe this place as a Forrest. "Did I get thrown out of the car or something?" I ask myself. Looking around I see no signs of the car, no signs of roads or anything but trees and plants and all that shit that gardeners like. "Clearly I'm still unconscious, maybe it was worse than I thought. That bloody cat its totally his fault one hundred and twenty miles an hour is not too fast at all..... I thought cats where meant to have amazing reactions!!" After sitting their awhile I decide I best just go do something, patience was never my best quality and right now I was so confused that I was actually getting annoyed. "Stupid tree!" I shout while punching a tree in disgust. Getting up I again check my surroundings and my own condition. “I seem fine, my clothes are torn up badly and a few cuts but yet again Liam survives a difficult situation, even though I don't think I'm in a comma or unconscious. this feels to real" Currently I am a 5ft 7 19 year old with a thin build and a metabolism that could make an elephant anorexic, I am wearing what’s left of my suit that I wear for work however at this point it’s barely holding onto me anymore. This all means that my tattoo is being shown off, now when I say tattoo I really mean scary as birth mark because it looks like a tattoo right over my heart however my dad and mum say it’s a birth mark. It looks just like a magical seal from the anime I watch at home and it’s pretty fucking awesome, I think my dad had it done on me when I was a kid. You would have to be pretty dumb to actually think this is a birth mark. Anyway, Finally I set off on my investigation as to what the hell is going on. A few minutes later I find something very veeeerry weird, it’s like a trail of slime....... gooey, sticky and really icky slime. However in search of answers I decide to follow the trail. After what seems like forever I suddenly feel like I'm being watched, call it a sixth sense if you will. I look around nervously, it doesn't feel right. "Hello!...... Bonjour?!" You never know they could of been French. As I am about to say greetings in every language I can think of a voice suddenly calls out to me. "Are you following me human?" "Errrrrrr human? you alright duck?" I replied, it was definitely a female voice talking to me but there was a weird noise I couldn't quite figure out! And what else is their but humans who talk our properly like this, idiot. From behind a tree the female lady came, out and stood...... well I'm not sure if its standing I mean is she sitting or what I have no idea, Basically she looks like water but in human form and I know exactly what she is. "A monster girl?" I ask myself, you see I have come across these things in games back home and I know what they are, this one is the classic slime girl and I won’t lie monster girls are not my thing!!. "Fuck it I’m obviously dead, nope I'm leaving goodbye have fun buddy" As I turn to leave a scary comment leaves the girls lips. "Did I say you could leave" She said dominantly "Of for fuck sake!!!" I shouted in my own head. Turning around to face the woman I look for a way out of this situation. I mean she’s a slime how fast can she be……..Okay maybe I should explain my knowledge of her as I said I have played games with beings like this in and in every game they are basically perverts that rape guys and sometimes they completely eat you which is not my sort of style. Interrupting my train of thought the slime girl begins to advance on me. Thanks for reading chapter one :) |
| Hey, firstly I just wanted to say congrats on starting a story, it can be quite nerve-racking to put your work up on display for others to read but I am glad that you have. Reading the first chapter intrigued me, it will be an interesting touch to have the MC have prior knowledge to MGs and how it will affect his opinion/actions towards them There are a few issues with punctuation but it was not detrimental to understanding the chapter and I am sure just re-reading your work can help with some of the issues. With this being a Freeform story I am interested to see how this will develop and how creative you can be, you can be assured that I will continue to read this. |
| Two new guys/gals here; welcome to you both. Read the first chapter and props for making irresponsible driving your ticket to the MSG world ;-) Since this story is MSGF I'm curious what this world is going to bring. |
MetallumOperatur said: Two new guys/gals here; welcome to you both. Read the first chapter and props for making irresponsible driving your ticket to the MSG world ;-) Since this story is MSGF I'm curious what this world is going to bring. Oh hey Metallum. Thanks for the welcome. I've been hanging around here for about a year, first without a profile and then recently with one, it does feel nice to be welcomed by a member of the community. |
AlwaysSanguineSep 5, 2015 4:34 PM
Valamere said: Then you are actually a bit longer floating around here than I am ;-P Oh hey Metallum. Thanks for the welcome. I've been hanging around here for about a year, first without a profile and then recently with one, it does feel nice to be welcomed by a member of the community. I just passed the half year mark. |
| Chapter 2 Here is another key just too help *Blue text is the main character *Red is the slime girl #Green is thoughts/talking in the MC’s head *Purple is the mystery being ****Chapter 2 start**** “Wait, wait! What do you even want from me?” I hope what I know isn’t right about these things, I really hope these aren’t sex crazed beings that just want to do really perverted shit. I mean I don’t mind the sex but I can imagine it getting tiresome and quite frankly dangerous. “You have to ask? Have you never met a monster or something before, all humans know that we want your semen you naive boy” “RIGHTTTTT because that’s normal isn’t it” “errrrr…….Yeah?” So it really looks like I have ended up in a world of monster girls and that said girls are exactly how I thought they would be from what I know, sex crazed beasts that will do nasty and rather kinky things to you. Hmmmmm kinky aye. “Unfortunately for you I can’t give you what you want, you see I have a problem” Oh by the way I forgot to mention I’m an extreme liar. “You have a problem?” “My dick doesn’t work you see, I mean not for what you want anyway” “HAHAHAHAHA!! How dumb do you think I am, you really thought I would just leave after that. Ill test your dick myself” Her reluctance to leave starts to panic me, my brain comes up with many different lies that I could tell but none of them are believable. “I don’t have a dick, no that’s stupid maybe monsters don’t turn me on…… like she would care. Oooooo I’ve got it!!!” “I AM DISEASED!!!!” I shout loud and clearly that I am in fact diseased with something that effects monster girls!. “Your diseased, with what then?” Shit! Didn’t think this far ahead and I have known idea of any serious diseases that would affect a slime. After contemplating my situation I realize the girl has dropped her guard, instead she is smirking. The kind of smirk that says “I know your lying but your attempts are funny”. That’s it the only way out of this is to make a run for it, the girl isn’t ready to chase her pray. It’s more like she has already caught it and is just playing with it. I’ll use her overconfidence against her. Looking at the ground I notice the dirt is crumbly and dry, I figure I could use it like it was sand. Kick it at her and then bomb it the other way to wherever the hell I end up. I take a deep breath preparing for the effort to escape. With a quick kick dirt goes flying all over the girl and I turn my back and run. “Bye!” I shout as I run through the trees sprinting like I was in school again with the adrenaline in my system pumping me up to a speed I haven’t achieved in a while. Thinking I have put some distance between me and the girl I turn around to see if she is still following me. “HUH NO WAY! your keeping up with me?” She’s right behind me and very angry, now I start to get a tad bit scared and all the power I felt starts to leave me. These monster girls may be a bit stronger than me. “You dare to try something like that? Bad move idiot” She says with a rather pissed of tone that makes me think if she catches me something is going up my ass!. “SO…. S…..so………..SORRY!!” I manage to shout while running and my fatigue starting to show as I can barely say the word. “YOU WILL BE ILL RIP YOU A NEW AS……..” The slime shouts as me but for some reason abruptly halts at the end no finishing the sentence even though I am pretty sure I know how it ends. A purple light shines behind me and vanishes, turning around I see what can only be described as a mess. If you imagine putting a bomb in a slime girl and then exploding said bomb that’s what I am seeing right now. Slime is everywhere on the plants, trees but it seems to lack the strength to come back together and form the girl in fact it seems lifeless. “Slimy you there?” “So am I currently witnessing a murder scene or what?” I ask myself as I realize she may actually be dead. “What the hell happened, the purple light….. what was that?” I was saved by a purple light, A light that also obliterated a monster like it was nothing. Whatever did this must be powerful….. very powerful. “hahahaha” A haunting laugh echoes through the trees and I can feel, I can feel the fact that it is aimed at me. There is someone else out there and they are looking right at me yet I can’t see them. It’s not a slime girl, whoever this is dark and dangerous to the point I start to get chills down my spine and the hairs on my body start to stand on edge. Run! I run as fast as I can in the first direction I see, whatever this is, it’s not something to piss off. I keep running in the hope I find a village of some sort as its starting to get late. The sun is setting and I’m pretty sure I don’t want to be out here at night. ***After darkness falls*** So I’m still out here at night thinking about the nasty laugh I heard and wondering who or what it came from. “God I need to eat, sleep and listen to music. Oh and there is a random light shining on the other side of the field I’m walking through” So if you’re wondering yes I have now resorted to speaking to myself while I walk through this other world which has so far been a forest and fields. “MUSIC!!! What if I can never listen to my ITunes again?” Tears start to well up in my eyes. No this can't be true I love music. “And the random light, WAIT! there is a light. That means people doesn’t I? I’ve only just realized and it’s not a normal light it’s through a window I can see the shape!!!. Windows mean houses and houses mean humans like me surely, I can’t be the only human left” With my new found determination I start to jog over to the light to find the source. So that’s the end of chapter 2 I hope you liked it. Thanks |
| A moment of silence for the poor slime girl.............................................................................. Somehow I get the feeling that house ain't going to have human in it... |
| I didn't noticed this story before. But most definitely, welcome and enjoy your stay. |
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| This is my third chapter, the chapter you finally meet someone interesting so have fun. The main character speaking aloud will be in blue The main character speaking in his head will be green And the new monster will be red “Uggghhhhh………… I hate outdoors, especially fields that are uneven making me unsteady on my feet .I just can’t wait to get inside with a warm fire and a nice bath, maybe some food in fact lots of food I’m starving right now!.” As I get close to the building with the light inside I notice a bunch of other buildings. I count six and the one with the light inside is the largest by far, the rest all seem abandoned. They were made with wood and clearly no one has been giving them any TLC as most have started to fall apart into ruin. Knowing me the people inside this house I’m going to are right maniacs that will want to do something really unpleasant to me, I mean growing up with monster girls around must have made it quite hard to be normal. “Right here we are.” I think to myself as I approach the doors of the building. First off I listen for the voices of others and for any strange noises that would make me think twice about making myself known. After a minute or two just standing there I hear nothing and so like the brave man I am I start to open the door…….. and after the door is open SUDDENLY! There is a relatively normal looking room with a massive open fire. The layout is quite weird through the first door is one massive room with a sofa next to the fire place after that there is pretty much nothing around. No tables, desks, ornaments its literally just a sofa and a fire. My stomach decides to make itself know and starts to growl, signalling for me to search for a kitchen or something where these people will store food. Not one to argue with the power of thy belly I decide to go through another door in which I hope is a massive room with a buffet and an all you can eat policy. Opening the door I find the kitchen (Well I assume it’s the kitchen) it looks like it has what a older kitchen would have. Wasting no time I decide to search every storage compartment available until I find food and of course when I search them and they turn up empty I get rather angry. After searching the entire room I have found NOTHING!, bordering on suicide my depression hits me hard. I literally just wanted a box of strawberries or brownies from Tesco, was it really too much to ask. Safety now leaves my mind and I feel the need to get whoever lives here to come and explain their shit food situation to me and make me a sandwich. “Hello!!!!! Anyone here!!!!” I shout loudly enough to wake anyone from their sleep. Folding my arms and tapping my foot in anger I impatiently wait someone to reply or come down here and talk to me. "“HAHAHA” I hear someone laughing uncontrollably as if they made the food situation bad so that I’d be upset. “Where are you, show yourself you’ve got some explaining to do!” “Oh your quite brave to talk to me like that” “Your quite brave to not have any strawberries! I’ve hurt people for less!” “Haha Oh I think I see where your confidence has come from…… You think your talking to a human don’t you?” “What else would I be talk…….. Oh deary me” Then it dawns on me this persons voice can’t be pinpointed, it’s like my ears have no idea. I can’t even hope to guess. The voice is also very seductive and calm, I feel like I could shout verbal abuse at them and they wouldn’t even react. Infact the laugh before is the same as the one this person just made, then that means this is the monster that made a mess of the slime girl. “You know what I think I’ll find food somewhere else madam don’t worry yourself” I take a bow and begin to walk towards the door which then decides to slam shut as to prevent my exit. “No I don’t want you to leave, I wouldn’t of protected you from the slime if I was just going to let you leave.” “You protected me, then I’ll ask the big question why?” “You’re a human male and I like things only a male has the ability to do” “Ohhhhhh right then well aren’t there any other males, like I know nothing about this place” “You know nothing? What do you mean, didn’t the other humans teach you about the world?” “They taught me about my world, not this one and look if we’re going to have a chat can I at least have a seat and see who I am talking to?” The door that had previously closed on me now opens allowing me to enter the room with the sofa and a nice warm fire. As I look at the sofa I notice something different, I believe it’s the back of someone’s head who is sitting on it. “Very well why don’t you come sit on the sofa with me and we can have this chat” With a slightly sexual tone making me think this is probably a dangerous thing to do but who cares. As walk around the sofa I I finally get to see the being that has ‘protected’ me from the slime. She’s a snake lady, I believe their called lamia’s but this one is quite different because she has that bit that sticks out on some snakes near the head, is it cobras I think that have them it’s very hard to describe to be honest because I know absolutely fuck all about snakes. She has the lower body of a snake and a relatively human upper half, her snake tale is black which I like and her upper half’s skin is a purple colour which is really attractive to me I won’t lie. The girl doesn’t seem to wear many clothes but instead has these weird silver jewelry pieces, Her hair is fucking long and it starts off black but seems to end in a reddish colour at the tips. Finally I get to the big detail that has pretty much left me stunned to the point I can’t stop looking, you see this woman has two massive boobies and boobies are nice. “He….hello” I stuttered because them tits though. “Hmmm my eyes are up here you know, and you can sit down” Gesturing for me to sit the end of her tail moves up giving me room. Not being one to ignore people’s request I calmly take a seat. “I was simply looking for any dangerous weapon hid between you cleavage is all!” Poor excuse. “Haha good excuse, now I will tell you all you need to know about this world and everything about everything however I want something in return.” “Wil you be able to help me get back to my world?” “Again I’ll talk to you about that later but first you have to make a deal with me, you need to agree to give me something in return of the knowledge that I give you.” “You’re talking sexual aren’t you” “Yep” A massive smile comes across her face. Knowledge is very important and she doesn’t seem like she’s that bad a person plus, lamia’s/this chick are pretty fit and this one is my type of monster if I have one. “Fine I’ll do that stuff in return” “Oh are you sure, are you ready to be wrapped in my tail as I rip through your clothes. Then my tail will bind your limbs as I stroke your dick until it gets hard……..slowly take it into my mouth as my saliva lubricates it, I’ll then pull your skin back and massage the tip with my tongue slowly licking the length of your pen” “STOP!!!!! I don’t even know your name” She just gave me a boner. She is very dangerous!!. That’s the end of chapter three thanks for reading and sorry for grammatical errors or spelling errors for that matter. |
Echidna_Guy said: Poor MC, only 3 chapters in and already deemed not interesting by his creator.This is my third chapter, the chapter you finally meet someone interesting so have fun.someone interesting so have fun. LoL, walks into another person's house without announcing himself, goes straight for the kitchen, and then gets pissed when there is no food available; nice attitude. That Apophis gets my blessing to not go easy on your ass ;-P Ah and one little thing you might want to keep in mind. Abbreviations like TLC might seem obvious to you and native speakers, but they are not necessarily as obvious to a non native speaker. So you might just want to write them out. |
MetallumOperaturSep 21, 2015 1:50 AM
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