| I must admit that I didn't enjoy the chapter at all. It is relatively long, at least for the local standards, but compromised of nothing else but a sex scene I simply can't find enjoyable, with a zero relevance to the story itself. On the other hand, I simply must commend you for a very rare quality around here - it is one of the stories that don't try to directly or indirectly influence the other stories by introducing the crippling mechanics, facts or wide-area effects. |
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Malise said: It is relatively long, at least for the local standards True, I originally didn't intend for it to be that long at all. I guess things popped without me really noticing, and I ended up still wanting to see it through. Definitely not planning to do that any time soon, shorter chapters being way more convenient since I can review them faster (instead of not at all with the longer ones that I just end up wanting to do nothing more than post it once its done). Malise said: a sex scene I simply can't find enjoyable, Well that was the original idea behind the chapter and these two characters but I hadn't really envisioned it in a way that fit before writing it. Don't really like a good part of it either but well. Malise said: with a zero relevance to the story itself. Yet. :P Probably obvious, but it'll be linked soon with the plot. I just felt that doing it that way would be better than introducing a bunch of characters at the same time, and it was also good to write something that didn't need a really specific time. Malise said: crippling mechanics, facts or wide-area effects. Well, there are a few things that you can call me out on, or at least there will be by the end of that arc like the usage of certain magics or some actions but it doesn't really have the potential to show in other stories at all, I wanted to make the first arc before doing a co-op or moving through the island but it's already been two years and look where we are :D |
tterreb said: On the contrary, I think it's a fairly good transition into another part of the plot. Just because you can't see the connection yet doesn't mean it isn't there. One of the main problems with this whole posting one chapter at a time is that the readers seem to expect them all to be self contained. If you start something that isn't immediately explained they assume there is no connection and that it is a poorly written chapter. I think I have to apologize again. I don't think the story is bad per se. It's slice-of-life nature can be seen as an asset and be very commendable to be this way after all the conflicts that other options caused, but it is still hard to see that sex scene would make a good introduction of any character outside the purely short porn flick which simply need more women/men for sake of variability. |
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| Kudo granted for writing the first futa h-scene I didn't immediately dislike. Don't take this as me now liking futas though; still a 100% on ship Yurki. :-P |
| So I've written that, incredibly slowly as I hadn't really imagined much of it at all and constantly got lost in thoughts while imagining other parts of the story, reviewing my plot, imagining Aya's adventures that I'll probably add once in a while as a sort of bonus and playing with my shitty excuse for a beard. Also I'll be speeding up pretty much everything for that first arc compared to what happened in the first 20 'chapters' (=entries) as getting too much into details will make everything way too slow and make me open up way too many plot holes. But here it is, I find it a bit weird but hope you enjoy :3 --------------- CHAPTER 24 --------------- --------------------- CHAPTER 24 END --------------------- :3 |
OcuFeb 10, 2021 5:09 AM
| Glad to see a new chapter. It has been a while so I needed some time to remember the plots that are going on at the moment. You're there with a werecat who just lost her sister, a child inari/youko who had something to do with that, a futa grizzly, and a yeti right? |
| Pretty much yep And it's fluffy |
OcuApr 9, 2016 2:48 PM
| There is definitely much fluffiness =) |
| Alright so there's that one. Gives a bit of backstory and other information I thought would be necessary. I decided to give a little twist, if it can even be called that at the end of the first scene, because I felt like that was good when writing it. Also no colors, because I'm introducing new characters and all the dialogue scenes in the coming chapters would have to go full rainbow. --------------- CHAPTER 25 --------------- ------------------ CHAPTER END ------------------ So yeah that's that :3 |
OcuFeb 10, 2021 5:10 AM
| Eyyy here it is That took way too long, and I actually was writing it. :| Going to start talking about the past stuff, including mental stuff, and I am not sure how realistic it will be, but inexperience + plot reasons + the stuff that I have already written, so I'm more going for what fits with the rest and seem believable than actual stuff. --------------- CHAPTER 26 --------------- ----------------- CHAPTER END ----------------- zer we go, flendz |
OcuFeb 10, 2021 5:11 AM
| It doesn't feel like a plot heavy chapter though. Keep up the good work |
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| Took some time, but finally read the two new chapters. It seems our little fox isn't a little fox at all. Curious where this is heading. |
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